Break Me

May 26, 2007 13:49

Break Me )

writing, poetry

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o_glorianna May 26 2007, 18:29:52 UTC
All I can say to this is: Mmmmm...

I love the rhyming and rhythm of it.
The conversation between the "I" and the breeze.
I need to think on this "break me" part though.

:)

Looking forward to the Firefly fic, in principle. I will get around to watching the show/movie at some point so I actually understand your story.

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threedee May 26 2007, 22:04:36 UTC
Yay TY! I feel like most of the first stanza is pre-writing.

Mwaha. The construction "think on" reminds me of Firefly.

As do... many things..

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atomicduck May 27 2007, 01:27:49 UTC
Vainglorious is like one of my favourite words. +80 bonus points!
I quite like the internal rhyme and how it manages to be both matter-of-factness and pretty. the convo with the breeze is awesome. :D

post that gorram story!

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threedee May 27 2007, 05:36:02 UTC
I like your description... and I like the word 'convo' because it makes me think of it as an msn convo. :D

About that--since it's your fav word--do you pronounce it 'vaing-glorious' with the 'ng' sound, or just 'vain-glorious'?

Posting tomorrow, I swears. And on that note, I came across this on quotationspage.com:
Carpe diem, quam minimum credula postero. -Horace

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atomicduck May 27 2007, 19:32:22 UTC
I've always said "vain+glorious", but now I'm curious, how would you say the 'ng' sound? I've tried saying it different ways, but can only get that one conceivable reading.

OH OH OH HORACE :D That's from his Odes. He's not my favourite Roman poet, but this one is a good one (and his most famous):

Ode I-XI

Don't you ask, Leuconoe-- the gods do not wish it to be known--
what end they have given to me or to you, and don't meddle with
Babylonian horoscopes. How much better to accept whatever comes,
whether Jupiter gives us other winters or whether this is our last

now wearying out the Tyrrhenian sea on the pumice stones
opposing it. Be wise, strain the wine and cut back long hope
into a small space. Even as we speak, envious time
flies past. Harvest the day and leave as little as possible for tomorrow.

(translation by David West, from my Oxford copy)

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threedee May 27 2007, 19:38:30 UTC
Wow that one's quite beautiful actually... who is Leuconoe, and how do you pronounce his/her name? :)

The alternate 'ng' pronunciation seems natural if I say it fast. Imagine connecting 'vain' and 'glorious' with the same sound as the NG in aNGle. However dictionary.com says it's just 'vain+glorious'.

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tacomeow May 27 2007, 16:14:45 UTC
*glomps winnies*

when are you coming? i must take you to the most amazing place....its a charming music store, they have everything! lol

PS: was wondering if u can bring me some stuff from home: ie: food *salivate*

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threedee May 27 2007, 17:33:38 UTC
That sounds awesome, we must go! We're there for the weekend of the 16th/17th, getting in on Friday and leaving Monday. So not too long :( What kind of food are we talking? :)

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tacomeow May 28 2007, 01:20:36 UTC
lol well home food of course....cooked by parents...i wonder if thats allowable on a plane....i miss home cooking SO MUCH

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threedee May 28 2007, 03:32:22 UTC
Ooooh I get it! :) I'm not sure if you're allowed to bring food past security... I'll find out.

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