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thesamefire

fic: Gravity Cannot Reach Us

Apr 13, 2009 13:46

GRAVITY CANNOT REACH US
Gerard/Ray, NC-17
4400 words

Gerard and Ray both get pretty handsy when they're drunk and things just happen.

Thanks to nokomis305 and evocatory for looking this over/listening to me over-think my way through the "plot".

( Maybe it's weird that Gerard's so touchy-feely with a guy he's really only known in the eight months they've been playing together, but... )

my chemical romance, fic

Comments 37

harborshore April 13 2009, 18:22:04 UTC

Nnnngh, yeah, that's really, really nice. I love all awkward makeouts, when you have to shift around and everyone involved is kind of uncomfortably positioned but no one wants to move. I love the way you write neurotic!Gerard, but you knew that. Also, the way you write about Ray's hands in this is sexy as hell.

Tiny note of questioning: you have "Ray shifts so he can get his other arm around Gerard" twice, which seems long for an intentional repetition? Or am I being an idiot again?

thesamefire April 13 2009, 18:35:01 UTC

I love all awkward makeouts TOO, SO MUCH. I want a million more stories like this, preferably written by other people.

That looks like a left-over c&p error from when I was cleaning up the chat stuff, thanks for catching it!

harborshore April 14 2009, 18:27:35 UTC

I second that. Not that I can't do awkward, because I love things like making people fall off the couch when it's really inconvenient, but other people are decidedly better at the makeouts part. I just want the handsy-when-drunk-story for any and all pairings, really. Bonus points for handwavey angsty pining at the beginning.

whoyouinvent April 13 2009, 18:33:36 UTC

uh, you write the best "plot".
i want to give you more coherent feedback, but my brain has been eaten by autocad/viz/school in general. maybe on the weekend?

thesamefire April 13 2009, 18:36:21 UTC

It may be pastede on, yay!, but it's still a coherent narrative! HOW ABOUT THAT.

Don't worry about the coherent, I caught your drift :) Are you done-done this weekend?!

whoyouinvent April 13 2009, 18:41:33 UTC

YES. aside from a presentation and a journal hand-in the 24th. but that totally doesn't count the same.

thesamefire April 13 2009, 18:56:27 UTC

that is AWESOME, congrats!

iamsupernova April 13 2009, 19:16:00 UTC

Asdusdhfuisdf yes. I see so little good Ray porn around, and this is deffffinitely well-received on that front. I really love your insecure Gerard, with his crush and his anxiety and how he gives in to the moment with Ray. <333

thesamefire April 14 2009, 15:06:57 UTC

Thanks!

turps33 April 13 2009, 22:01:27 UTC

This is so good and for a pairing that should be written more.

Just lovely.

thesamefire April 14 2009, 15:06:08 UTC

Thank you!

nokomis305 April 13 2009, 22:55:41 UTC

I love, love, love the lazy, sweet tone of this, and how Gerard's uncertainty is mirrored by Ray's at the end. ♥

thesamefire April 14 2009, 15:06:38 UTC

♥♥♥♥