Fanfiction: Taste Bud Issues
Title: Taste Bud Issues
Genre: Romance/Humour
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: Ontae and Jongkey (Mentions of 2min)
Summary: Taemin has severe relationship problems for a reason that could only be considered completely odd by his shrink, Kim Kibum.
A/N: About 5000 words.
( “It didn’t last with Sulli because she gave me cavities.” )
Genre: Romance/Humour
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: Ontae and Jongkey (Mentions of 2min)
Summary: Taemin has severe relationship problems for a reason that could only be considered completely odd by his shrink, Kim Kibum.
A/N: About 5000 words.
( “It didn’t last with Sulli because she gave me cavities.” )
“Well that is what a shrink -shit- psych student does,” cursed Kibum for his minor slip up, “But you know, usually the information they are given makes at least some sense within the context of working reality.” - That's me trying to convince my friends that I can't help them unless they try to be logical XD I feel you Key...
“The first sign of a kid is one who wants to be treated like an adult,” replied Kibum nonchalantly, using a hand to push away Taemin’s slender finger. - You got it down perfectly. I was all "DUH"...my flatmate probably lost any hope she still had for me after I decided to comment ALOUD while reading this 8I
I'm still amazed that Jinki manged to actually cook everything without burning the kitchen down. You were lenient with him XD He's like one of my flatmates though with the exception that she ends up with a brown pancake egg-like thingy because she leaves it on the pan and goes away...*cough*
I think I would have to quote the whole kissing scene too OMG. It was so well-written *O* And Taemin attacking Onew...YES! He always acts as if he's so deprived. Touching Onew everywhere, all the freaking time. Has there ever been a moment when he has not looked at Onew while he was speaking? I think not...-_-' Subtle Teamin, really subtle. Here I supposedly should be declaring my love for you and giving you cookies and stuff but let me spare you that...or not *gives lots of cookies* Pardon my long comment but you made me see hearts and sparkles and glitter and happy things *O* So yeah, I <3 it XDD
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LOL I am glad you could relate so personally to my story. And yes, I tend to make my comments out loud while I am on the internet too. For those who don't understand that reaction, it's their loss lolol.
Hmmm I dunno, I just don't actually see Onew as clumsy as people make him out to be lolol. I mean before Key went on that reality show, I actually think it might have been Onew who was the best cook out of Shinee.
LOL THE KISSING SCENE. That was ridiculous but I am glad you liked it. AND YES FELLOW ONTAE STAN(?) I AGREE. Taemin always looks at Onew.
/accepts cookies... THANK YOU! ♥
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My flatmate lost all hope quite a long time ago I think. She accepted the fact that I'm not exactly your normal human being *cough* She talks to furniture and food though so we're kind of well-matched XD
I don't see him as that clumsy either. Still, people just have a tendency to portray him as the clumsiest person on earth. You broke away from the standard cliche^^ I consider him rather socially awkward, if anything. His jokes are really low (can't help but love him anyway).
It so was not. I live for good Ontae kissing scenes. They are extinct ;; I have just recently discovered your Ontae fics and read them all in one go before my exam doom started. You definitely seem to improve with each one you write. Moreover, I love AUs. I've been previously in Arashi fandom in which AUs are the most common thing and grew way too fond of them. You are filling in the lack of good Ontae AU fics for me (right after mujyakina). I rarely feel the need to comment on fics and if I do I tend to keep it short. You made me conflicted with your last fic enough for me to still feel hesitant of commenting on the 3rd part...I want to and not at the same time ;; That would usually mean that you must be on your way to becoming quite a good writer^^
*grammar compulsive obsession switched on* Fellow Ontae shipper? Ontae is so amazing really. People should get that and abandon their Onkey fixation. And omg I wrote an essay again. It's a good thing I'm, at least, not as talkative on-line as I am in real life -_-'
Anyway...*showers you with some more cookies* <3
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/is embarrassed
T____T You are far too kind. I am glad to hear I am improving cause I wasn't sure if I was getting worse or better LOL. alkdjlskjd Mujyakina is the best ffft. I hope I can become a good write even if this is just a hobby.
LOL abandon Onkey haha. I like them too but a lot less than Ontae. I kind of find it funny how people say there are so few Ontae hints when I think they are EVERYWHERE lol. THANK YOU SO MUCHHH. YOU ARE SO KIND. /hugs
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You should not doubt yourself XD I already thought that In Another World was a big improvement from your earlier fics. You definitely have good ideas and while sometimes your plot may seem rushed, you are improving. This piece was just perfect because everything just seemed really realistic. It flowed very well. The moment I stop questioning why the characters are doing what they are doing and can relate to what they are feeling, I consider the story good. With your last story I felt like there was something lacking. Maybe it should have been longer? It was hard to understand the whole AU because there was so much going on there but not much of a detailed explanation. Still, I don't think it was bad. I actually did like it quite a lot (even if I was too lazy to comment). Well, it might have been a bit off topic but as far as I know writers like constructive criticism ^^
And I'm sure you will become one. Practice makes perfect after all XD
I don't get Onkey. Where are they? I can't see it AT ALL T_T If I did my fandom life would have been so much easier as there are tons of Onkey fics...
You are very welcome. I'm just being honest *clings*
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