The Art of Writing a Sex Scene, Part 2

[zelda_zee]

Thanks again to elliotsmelliot and to everyone who responded to the first part of this essay. My apologies for the delay in posting the conclusion of it.

Warning: essay includes frank discussion of sex and porn and lots of naughty words. Look on it as NC-17-rated meta.
Disclaimer: This essay is entirely subjective. I’m not trying to tell anyone how they ought

Comments

[zelda_zee]

I went back to your fic and the virginity bit was only a couple of sentences. I don't think it was that distracting. Plus, your POV character appears to be very self-centered. It doesn't seem a stretch that he'd tend to be thinking about himself when he ought to be thinking of his partner.

Really, I didn't have an issue with the vision. It's not like I need sex-focused porn all the time. I respect a story that uses sex as an important plot element. I think the only thing that really niggled was wanting to know if Felix had had an orgasm or not. It seemed kind of important to the dynamic between the two to know that.

Oh, Withdrawal was so fun. And dirty! It was my first time reading Sayid as a Dom. Needless to say, I found the idea captivating.

I adored that scene on the show where Charlie disses Ana and hands Sayid the gun. God bless Dom, he really is brilliant at imbuing pretty much anything he wants with sexual subtext.

There are 5 Withdrawal fics (I think that's all of them) linked at ficonastick, themoononastick's fic comm. Click on her Charlie/Sayid tag and scroll to the bottom.

Sayid's an awesome Dom. He's an awesome Sub too. He's just all round sexually awesome!

LOL! I couldn't agree more!

[falafel_musings]

I think the only thing that really niggled was wanting to know if Felix had had an orgasm or not.

LOL! Bless you for caring about Felix's orgasm more than Gaius did! (he is a very selfish egotistical character, I'm ashamed to be a Baltar fan, I really am) Well, Felix did have an orgasm, hence why he was all woobie and snuggly afterwards. Thats another thing I need to keep in mind. I kinda pressumed the reader would know an orgasm had taken place without me needing to highlight it. Thats another slash-novice error I'll take note of.

Thanks for the link and the beta offer! I'll be in touch.