A Tale of Two Dead Ringers - Chapter 17

[mad_pac]

Now prepare yourselves for a big ego trip! And no, I'm not talking about my vain feelings as a writer...

In this chapter... Ned confronts his fears and fantasies in the most unusual and fantastical way.

Comments

[kennethchrislee]

Oh, the twists and turns in this story. Now we have real-time out-of-body experiences? Part of me hates the fact that I can never clearly see where this story is going, but it's good. It keeps me on edge, keeps me wanting more.

I enjoyed this chapter. And Jaye apparently has one fiercely powerful kiss.

[mad_pac]

By the way, I just made a change in the final part of the text. I felt I had to incorporate Ned's spoon dialogue to the dialogue with Play-Doh Jaye. Please check it out!

[mad_pac]

Yeah... This is a delicate balance... The reader should want to come back for something different every time. But at the same time, the reader always comes for what feels familiar, and wants to repeat nice, familiar experiences. I hope I can keep this balance well.

I think Jaye has many hidden and interesting skills even she isn't quite aware of.

Or maybe it's my personal enthusiasm with the actress speaking....

[kennethchrislee]

Love the new dialogue. So very like Ned to ramble on about something like spoons when nervous.

[zanthlay]

That was trippy, but intriguing - I loved it! :D I'm looking forward to seeing what comes next...

[mad_pac]

Great! And don't worry, things won't remain trippy forever.

Bee Ned

[mad_pac]

Did you see Bee Ned in the picture of chapter 16? You might want to check the comment and the pictures I posted showing that.

Re: Bee Ned

[applegrass_wolf]

OH MY GOD I DID NOT SEE THE BEE! That's amazing!

[applegrass_wolf]

Weird! Bizarrely, wonderfully weird! Twisty and turny also. But I'm still absolutely loving it ;D

[mad_pac]

Wow that's great! Wait for Aaron's ego trip then!

Bee Ned

[mad_pac]

Did you see Bee Ned in the picture of chapter 16? You might want to check the comment and the pictures I posted showing that.

Bee Ned appears in the picture of chapter 16

[mad_pac]

In chapter 16 I introduced this character, Bee Ned. It's just that back then you didn't know it was Ned, and that the bee was important. But I gave a clue. You might have not noticed, but it appeared in the chapter picture I posted. Unfortunately, facebook reduces the images terribly, so you can't see it beyond a dot. But in the original picture, it can be noticed if you pay attention. Just as a curiosity, here it is:

Re: Bee Ned appears in the picture of chapter 16

[kennethchrislee]

I sooo never even noticed that, but it's clever how you foreshadowed with the picture. Helps bring everything together.

Re: Bee Ned appears in the picture of chapter 16

[mad_pac]

In the picture I have in my computer, the bee is tiny, but clear enough. Facebook, however, kills the joke, so to speak, and distorts the picture, giving it an inferior resolution. But now you can see.

[scallywagbadegg]

Wow, wow, wow,....now I am really confused...great stuff as always...but oh my...I thought I got it....yeah..now I understand..and I kept reading and reading and then again....aaahhhh...what the hell is going on here?...*lol*..You are a master of turns and twists....and I really loved the new point of view you've written in that storyline...that's awesome...I really enjoyed it. Thank you once again! And...shame on me...I did not realize in the picture that there was a bee beneath Digby.

[mad_pac]

I'm so glad you enjoyed it! Well, facebook killed the picture... Now, if you think THAT was crazy, wait for next chapter, Aaron's ego trip. Like the dandelion car, It'll blow you away!