A Bachelor's Life

[theorchidforest]

Title: A Bachelor's Life
Author: Ran-dezvous
Genre: Family and General
Fandom: Detective Conan
Character: Agasa Hiroshi, with mentions of Fusae Campbell/Kinoshita Fusae, Kudou Shinichi, Mouri Ran, Haibara Ai/Miyano Shiho, the Black Organization, Miyano Atsushi, and the Detective Boys
Word Count: 694
Rating: PG-13
Warnings: Doesn't have any plot at

Comments

[mountainelement]

Good exploration of Agasa's character here. I like how he's not really attracted to anyone. It makes this fic really stand out from all the PWPs out there.

He really is a good father, but it's sad how bad some of the other fathers are. Though maybe we're not seeing the whole perspective on them? Maybe Yusaku has some secret reason for why he's not around that hasn't been revealed yet?

As for criticism, I'm not positive but it feels like the tenses keep changing. "If the answer ends up being in the affirmative, then, he can truly say he wasn't alone anymore." Should it be "isn't" instead of "wasn't", or am I completely off?

[theorchidforest]

Good exploration of Agasa's character here. I like how he's not really attracted to anyone. It makes this fic really stand out from all the PWPs out there.Thank you very much! ♥ I'm really glad you don't think he's out of character. To be honest, I never really thought of Professor Agasa as asexual or aromantic before writing this, but as I was writing it, it just makes so much sense! Think about it, the only time we see him think or mention Fusae was during that first-love case of his, and he doesn't seem to feel the need to have a wife or a girlfriend. (And he doesn't seem to be gay, either, har har

[mountainelement]

"It makes this fic really stand out from all the PWPs out there."

Sorry, I was actually trying to say that it's nice to have a fic that has an asexual character, considering all the fics about the characters only having sex. I just found out what PWP meant before posting my first comment, and they get on my nerves. It was a weird thing to say though. Sorry for the confusion!

Maybe Yuusaku is investigating the Black Org.'s overseas dealings? And all this stuff about "hiding from his editors" is actually his private code for staying ahead of the Black Org.? In that case, leaving Shinichi by himself would probably be in order to show the Black Org. that his son doesn't know anything. Yuusaku might have made a deal with the Black Org. that everyone plays by certain rules, and that he would do X if the Black Org. tries to use his son against him. Of course, then Shinichi went and got involved on his own...

[theorchidforest]

Thank goodness it was all just a misunderstanding! It's kind of awkward for a fic about an asexual character to be compared to a PWP (though still sensible, as some asexuals do masturbate). Don't worry about it, though; it happens. *grins

[mountainelement]

I'm terrible at getting my meanings across, it seems. :) By making a deal, I'm suggesting that Yuusaku said something like, "I'm going to keep investigating you, but I won't reveal certain information until I know enough to take you down completely. I have set things up so that, in the event of my death, everything I have collected will be released to every major law enforcement agency in every country you operate in. If you attempt to use my son against me, then again, I will release everything I have collected so far, and that will cause you quite a bit of damage even if it's not enough to take you down yet. It's in your best interests to let me live while you try to figure out how to stop all of my contingency plans

[theorchidforest]

Or maybe I'm not as fluent in English as I thought. *not my native language*

I heartily approve of this. ♥ It'd be great if someone wrote a fic regarding this scenario or, even better, if this would happen in canon!