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Okay, so, this fic may will take some explaining. (Especially since I have not previously shown enough interest in BSG to write an 8000+ fic about it.)
( for those who are vaguely interested, and need some kind of explaining )
( for those who are vaguely interested, and need some kind of explaining )
And all that IN ONE NIGHT.
And the crazy thing? You pulled it off. All of it. And it works beautifully. The verbal sparring, the unintended connection, the dance. The pacing builds so beautifully in this first section. Their interaction never feels forced, never feels jarring. Just a natural progression. Suspicion and mutual curiosity that slides into something else altogether.
I'm glad you used Laura's voice to tell this story, and I like the idea that this is probably the only time we will hear from her. Any later in the SP story and she's too closed off, too shut down. But here the world is still new and mostly good, and she still believes. (And as we've discussed, she later believes in Kara, but that's about it. She never this open again. I think the trick will be getting her to a place post SP where you could have her be the narrator if you wanted to.)
Oh Laura. She so smart, and so analytical and so so unprepared for anything like Bill Adama.
Looking up at him, Laura didn’t know why she should suddenly notice now that his eyes were actually blue; dark blue like dusk, so dark that anyone who never got this close would assume they were brown.
The files said brown; all of them. She knew it for a fact.
This is the perfect summation of their entire relationship. Careful study, perfect scrutiny and observation, and still something new left to learn. And the commitment it implies about Laura here-- just gah. I can't wait to see this paid off in the follow-up.
**twirls off to part two**
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And the crazy thing? You pulled it off. All of it. And it works beautifully.... Their interaction never feels forced, never feels jarring.
I know just how high your standards are, so this is just about the best compliment this story could get. I really did want to shoot for the one night, and I was pretty confident of it - and I knew that if it didn't work, you would let me know. And once again, thank you so much for your feedback and helping me pull it into shape! It feels so wonderfully tight, you know?
Suspicion and mutual curiosity that slides into something else altogether.
I don't know if I've mentioned my conversation!kink to you specifically yet, but my goodness, this is pretty much where I live. I ADORE this kind of nexus, where people meet and connect and actually change one another through communication (verbal and otherwise). It just - yeah. That's my sweetspot, right there. Which is probably why B/L intrigued me to write - I was thinking, while weighing the dynamics of K/L vs B/L, and discussing how little pilots use words, that for K/L (in spypilots especially), their conversation is in their sex (and their sexually-charged physical contact), whereas for B/L, their sex is in their conversation. Which may be oversimplifying it somewhat, but I think the core is there, the physical vs verbal proclivities of each pairing. (Applies to violence, too. And power dynamics. And so on....)
and I like the idea that this is probably the only time we will hear from her.
Oh yes, me too! She is so very Sphinx-like, almost, in the rest of the story. So fascinating. And much as I enjoyed seeing the potential of Bill through her eyes here, I am so much more looking forward to seeing her through his older, wiser, enduringly loving eyes. I can't wait to see what he sees, that no one else can or does.
I think the trick will be getting her to a place post SP where you could have her be the narrator if you wanted to.
Yes, totally. And I owe you more Laura-Kara thoughts. :):)
*twirls the twirls of the sleep-deprived-but-happy*
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It is, it's so incredibly precise (and strange as that sounds, it's the thing I love most in storytelling.) I want the language to be precise, the word choice, the narrative structure. I want everything to be thought-through and premeditated. I want to feel why the words you've chosen are special (simply because of the others you didn't use to make your point). And it's just all here. I'm so proud of and in love with this story on ALL THE LEVELS.
that for K/L (in spypilots especially), their conversation is in their sex (and their sexually-charged physical contact), whereas for B/L, their sex is in their conversation
Yes. Gah. Total inverse right there. And I love them both equally. And they both work so well for their respective characters.
I am so much more looking forward to seeing her through his older, wiser, enduringly loving eyes. I can't wait to see what he sees, that no one else can or does
YES. I CANNOT WAIT. I cannot wait to see everyone through Bill's eyes. I want to hear about Lee, about Kara, about Laura. I want to hear about all of them through his voice.
We need to talk soon. This story still has such a hold on me. I'm dying to know the corresponding bookend.
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Yes, me too. It's such a delight. Sloppy storytelling has, on occasion, even made me angry. Even more than just a poor story. :[
I want to hear about all of them through his voice.
I know! Things are percolating. They haven't hit that critical mass where he starts telling me what's going on, yet, but the shape is beginning to show. We do need to talk soon! :)
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You are so not alone in this. Promise. :)
They haven't hit that critical mass where he starts telling me what's going on, yet, but the shape is beginning to show.
You just say the word when you're ready to chat. Or heck even if you want to just toss around ideas....
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