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ok this is something i started a while ago im not shore what to call it its not a script or a story but its kinda a cross :-s or at leats i think its how i invisage a film and the best i can discribe it i guess lol anyhow i want opinion if u can tell me if its worth carrying on or how i should write it to make it clearer if u have any idea how to script hehe
"the old man crouches down nimbly running trough the tall grass followed by his son ploding along behind trying to keep up without giveing there position away to there pray.
sudanly the old man stops dead in his tracks and stick his arm out to the side his son not paying
attention more worried about keeping up runs into his arm and almost falls down. without saying a word they excange glances and the father stares ahead at the deer in the open area around the brook in the woods he puts his hand on his sons sholder and forces his to his knees as to not be seen and then puts his hand out mothioning for his bow. the boy takes his fathers bow from off his sholder and hands it to the old man wathcing him intently not wanting to miss a trick from the old master. the old man takes an arrown from the quiver on his back and placeing the notch on the string levels his bow looking down the arrow shaft, he takes aim at the deer and pulls his arm back slowly. then leting the arrow lose it wissles trough the air and lands in the deers BIG FAT ASS! and the deer collapses to the ground.
the pair excange a well done glance and stand up and start walking slowly towards there prize. suddanly the old mans face turns to feer as he grabs the boy and this tim literaly trows him to the ground. looking ahead they can see a huge black orc hulking out of the tree line the two stare as the beast walks up to there prize and rips its leg off with its bare hands and starts to eat the raw flesh. the old man slowly starts to edge back but as he steps back he sees his son to the side has taken his bow and is aiming at the orc. he waves franticly with his arms to try and stop him but cant say anything for fear of being spoted but its to late the bow fires and misses the orc hitting the tree to its side.
the orc jumps up from the dead deer and now standing tall looks over at the two seeing them sticking out the grass when stod pround the orc easly breaks 8 feet and the boy scared freezez the old man takes his bow in a desperate attempt to stop the orc and loads one arrow and fires it as the orc slowly starts to plod towards them the arrow hits him in the sholder he stops for a second befor snapping the arrown of and pulling out a bone claw that looks like the antler of a deer. the gaint beast lets out an almighty roar befor charging at the two. though there is a good 20-30 feet between them the orcs giant steps mean he has coverd it in meer seconds.
the old man steps infront his son and pulls out a short sword in an effort to protect him but the orc smashes the tiny blade from his hand with a swing from his forearm. and then plunges the bone claw into the old mans neck the old mans body falls ontop of his son knocking him to the ground and lieing ontop as the old man hits the floor his shirt falls open and a medalian falls to the ground. the orc hulks over the pair and tears the medalion from his neck befor pulling the claw out of the old mans neck. he raises it back up again about to strick the small boy half hidden under his fathers limp body when past the camera runs 1 then 2 then 5 then dozens and dozens of orcs chargeing trough the forest the one standing over the boy grunts and then runs of with the chargeing hord in the direction of the village.
bla monkey toss"
"the old man crouches down nimbly running trough the tall grass followed by his son ploding along behind trying to keep up without giveing there position away to there pray.
sudanly the old man stops dead in his tracks and stick his arm out to the side his son not paying
attention more worried about keeping up runs into his arm and almost falls down. without saying a word they excange glances and the father stares ahead at the deer in the open area around the brook in the woods he puts his hand on his sons sholder and forces his to his knees as to not be seen and then puts his hand out mothioning for his bow. the boy takes his fathers bow from off his sholder and hands it to the old man wathcing him intently not wanting to miss a trick from the old master. the old man takes an arrown from the quiver on his back and placeing the notch on the string levels his bow looking down the arrow shaft, he takes aim at the deer and pulls his arm back slowly. then leting the arrow lose it wissles trough the air and lands in the deers BIG FAT ASS! and the deer collapses to the ground.
the pair excange a well done glance and stand up and start walking slowly towards there prize. suddanly the old mans face turns to feer as he grabs the boy and this tim literaly trows him to the ground. looking ahead they can see a huge black orc hulking out of the tree line the two stare as the beast walks up to there prize and rips its leg off with its bare hands and starts to eat the raw flesh. the old man slowly starts to edge back but as he steps back he sees his son to the side has taken his bow and is aiming at the orc. he waves franticly with his arms to try and stop him but cant say anything for fear of being spoted but its to late the bow fires and misses the orc hitting the tree to its side.
the orc jumps up from the dead deer and now standing tall looks over at the two seeing them sticking out the grass when stod pround the orc easly breaks 8 feet and the boy scared freezez the old man takes his bow in a desperate attempt to stop the orc and loads one arrow and fires it as the orc slowly starts to plod towards them the arrow hits him in the sholder he stops for a second befor snapping the arrown of and pulling out a bone claw that looks like the antler of a deer. the gaint beast lets out an almighty roar befor charging at the two. though there is a good 20-30 feet between them the orcs giant steps mean he has coverd it in meer seconds.
the old man steps infront his son and pulls out a short sword in an effort to protect him but the orc smashes the tiny blade from his hand with a swing from his forearm. and then plunges the bone claw into the old mans neck the old mans body falls ontop of his son knocking him to the ground and lieing ontop as the old man hits the floor his shirt falls open and a medalian falls to the ground. the orc hulks over the pair and tears the medalion from his neck befor pulling the claw out of the old mans neck. he raises it back up again about to strick the small boy half hidden under his fathers limp body when past the camera runs 1 then 2 then 5 then dozens and dozens of orcs chargeing trough the forest the one standing over the boy grunts and then runs of with the chargeing hord in the direction of the village.
bla monkey toss"