'All in the Name' (KR, PG)

[gumnut]

I'm not entirely happy with this one. It started off in one direction and then took off in another, weaving all over the road like Kitt would if he mistook a power socket for a network connection. In summary, I don't know whether it works, I don't know whether it is in character, but I gotta go cook dinner now, so it is what it is

Comments

[tomywca]

Okay, I really like this.

“I think I prefer 'Mickey'. As you know, I have a fondness for mouse jokes.” Michael’s face was just a nice shade of pink.

I was howling with laughter. Kitt finally wisens up and plays just a tad below the belt *eg*

His voice subroutine suddenly found a hitch and froze.

*sighs happily* What a brilliant line.

Personally, I think the fact that this fic took a left turn at Albuquerque is just what needed to happen. It flows well, and fits the characters.

hugs
tomy
who needed a KR fix

[gumnut]

I'm glad you enjoyed it, Tomy :D

You can basically get out a pair of scissors and cut this fic in two. First half ends where Michael declares that nicknames are a no-no. The whole thing changes tune after that and wanders off into nowhere.

This is what happens when I start writing a fic, stop, go do some painting for a couple of days, and then attempt to write some more.

I need a brain replacement.

Thank you so much for reading and sending feedback, you feed my pen.

Nutty
(who has to go to work again, ugh)

[pheral]

completely honestly, i thought it was great, very funny and sweet, and i loved the bit about Devons anger! but.. i didnt like the ending. those two or three last lines.
thats my five cents! >flicks out claws in preparation and tries to look scary<

grr?

[gumnut]

Yes, I think that was the problem with this fic, it sorta jumped all over the place and didn't have a clear focus. The ending, obviously a pathetic attempt to catch onto the rest of the fic and pull it together, didn't quite work. I shoulda stopped it at He had received so much more. It might also have something to do with hubby getting up to start dinner in a very big hint that he was starving and why hadn't I started it?

Thanks for your feedback, Pheral, and please don't throw your computer through the window, it will make contacting you all the more expensive and difficult.

Nutty
(deciding that there is nothing in her head, cos nothing rattles when she shakes it - except perhaps her nose)

[pheral]

but you gotta keep it, and change it maybe. what you said about ending at that line, that would make it all okaaaay. keep it keep it
::stares into gumnuts eyes in hypnotic way::
keeeeep the fiiiiic, you are feeeeeling co-ooooooperative.

::runs rabildly away to work::

boing kerboiiiing boing kerboiiing...

[dknightshade]

Bwahhahahahahahahaha!

And kittens kill mice. Hehehehehehehe!!

Glad my issues could at least lead to more fic that's a good thing, right?

But yeah, I was afraid I was going to have to step in there and take Michael out, but luckily for me, Kitt can handle things himself. ;-)

I could just see Kitt not caring for some of Michael's woman. *snerk*

Well written as always. I kinda like where it went, even if it was sort of a tangent -- real life is like that sometimes.

[foxmom]

That was great. I loved the banter...Kitt getting the one up on Michael!

Yes, you could have ended it after **He had received so much more,** but the ending is certainly fine...you ended on a light note...and for gosh sakes, the image of Michael in the mouse ears...gotta love that!

And what was the song/music they both agreed on? Just curious...

[moonbeamsfanfic]

::hangs head in shame:: I'm an idiot -- how did I not see this earlier?! Sorry, Nutty, my bad. :(

I loved it, just as it was. I read it without an expectations, so I didn't even see it wander off the map. And really, sometimes that's a very good thing. Shady's "Soap-Sud Tears" was supposed to go in an entirely different direction, got lost, and wound up right back home -- and it worked! So did this! :D

“A shine? She tried to polish me off. If I hear the name ‘Kitten’ one more time, I declare I will not be responsible for my actions.”

Quite possibly my favorite line. I loved the pun! ::snicker:: Would you shoot me if I told you I actually like the nickname 'Kitten'? I even think 'Mickey' is pretty funny, although I admit I prefer the classic Michael. (I've never liked 'Mike' as nickname though. ;P)