Well well...bad poetry, eh?

[laurii]

Feel free to critique them, though I know they're not good anyhow.

Such pain-
how can this be?
My saviour;
Love's messiah-
Both bringing life
and deflowering a
virgin soul.
Slowly,
You embitter me.


She was the type
Who got the best grades
They all called her smart
But there are always trades.

This girl, you will see,
Lacked in common sense,
She was perfect in a classroom;
On the streets she was dense.

One day she met a guy
We all said, "He's okay".
But then he got abusive
And by his side she'd stay.

He'd make her apologise
When she wasn't wrong
Or extort from her presents
When she went away too long.

We told her he was bad
But she said, "That can't be!
I love him with all my heart,
and he said he loves me!"

We tried to explain
That it all was a lie
But she wouldn't listen
Though all he did was make her cry.

And the end of the story
Is not happy, sad to say,
For she's still with that boy
to this very day.

We all thought she was flawless
In her perfect little world
But now we all see
She's just another foolish girl.