The Dancer - Chapter 2
Leon woke in the morning feeling heavy, and tired. Not an entirely new sensation to him, but still wholly unwelcome. Since he had begun watching The Dancer, sleep had become an increasing luxury for him, one that he couldn’t afford, what with working mornings and all.
Leon was a security guard at a local bank. Not exactly an interesting job, ( Read more... )
“Not addicted,” he muttered, “just dependant. S’different.” He had some issues enunciating before about eleven. … p.m. EPIC LUFFS. THIS LINE WAS PERFECT. Brilliantly executed.
"Aerith and Zacky sitting in a tree..." *trails off* Because I'm attempting to dispel the horrible sense of foreboding, because this seems to just SCREAM "Aerith and Cloudy sitting in a tree..." And that makes me nervous.
And let me tell you. Hayner is ALL over that sports page that Seifer wants. Uh-huh. Can I steal your universe for a little bit? I wanna write about securityguard!Seifer and sportdude!Hayner. And how a newspaper brought them together. It'll be a bloody brilliant plot device.
The description of the glasses and the pose and the newspaper just SCREAMED schoolteacher!Leon at me. It was slightly terrified, but then it was okay because it were epic. And the vision in my mind made me squee with happiness. :)
Seifer = OH's favorite character EVAR. I dunno. I"m pretty fucking THRILLED. I feel the chapter needs a little more beef. It kind of leaves us with a sense of "this is not a conclusion" there at the end. But, perhaps that was what you were going for. Anyway. Its bitching. And I enjoyed it IMMENSELY.
[Also I'm pretty psyched because there were gay guys on Dr. Who today. So I was much pleased. "All the decent blokes ride the other bus." <-- OH lol'd.]
UHM. I think I'm done babbling on your post. :)
_OH
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And yes, you're right to have some horrible sense of foreboding, because HORRIBLE THINGS WILL HAPPEN!!! **evil laughter**. And I'm glad you liked that line. 'Twas one of my faves, and I was trying to figure out how to make it come out without sounding really stupid... hehe
I'm gonna try and get out another chapter a.s.a.p., although that could take a while. And the next one's going to be from Cloud's POV. I think..... I really want it to be, because I have the plot planned out, but not how I'm going to write it, and I', trying not to dwell on this so I don't have more massive issues.
And yes, feel free to take them all and the universe too. I wanna read this SeiHay story!!!! -sob- Lolz. And how you have /me/ thinking schoolteacher!Leon too.... -sob- Trying to resist the urges here, doll.
Anywayyyyyyy long comment reply, ovah. Thanks for teh epic-reviewingness!
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