ANONYMOUS WRITING FEEDBACK MEME
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sunny_and_sides here on LJ - also futurecag on both LJ and fanfiction.net
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Sometimes though your sentences get on the long and wordy side, making them kind of confusing. Long sentences aren't bad at all, but you might want to play around with starting out with short sentences and then going back and joining some where it would work.
It isn't really a problem at all with your stories because the sort of narrative style works for you, but you might also consider playing around with more description, like settings and characters' body language, as well as some figurative language. You have characterization down well, but you could enhance it with more description.
Keep up the awesome writing! The more your write the better you get, whether you like it or not. ;P
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S. Phantom on fanfiction.net or SilverPhantom on deviantart.com.
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okamichan, or a variant, pretty much everywhere except deviantart where I'm Jookami
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I love a ridiculously huge amount of the stuff you write, and the ideas/concepts/stuffers you come up with are fantastic. By this, of course, I mean concepts when it comes to bonding, hubs, the origins of certain mechs, and all the other little things you throw in. Your imagination shows no bounds.
I think, if I were to say one little itty bitty negative thing, I would say that reading Starcrossed confuses me sometimes. Having multiple storylines criss-crossing around each other with random drabbles thrown in can get a bit disorienting, but, I love it so darn much that, when necessary, I go back and read the last few chapters to orient myself.
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I can understand the drabbles being a tad confusing. It was written as a bit of a one shot at a time. I'm still considering how I can fix this in the final revision, though the only solution may be in keeping a chronological version up.
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