Coke Bunny

[testsubjectspaz]

        On set. Click black and white cardboard, the director tells the actors to act. Eighty-five takes today. But the coke helps. The little cocaine kid, the pied piper of the now, leading a generation of children to nosebleeds and brain damage. It's just like powdered sugar for your brain.

So what if I took the money? The work is hard,

Comments

Really fucking nicely done.

[splinterofchaos]

That was a fucking awesome story, even for you! I think it's the best (whole) story you've done yet. When you told me the idea in the car, I honestly thought it would be just a simple set up lead-into-climax-without-foreplay story, but you really did well with the concept.

Could be a bit longer, my writing teacher would complain about it being incomplete and not answering enough questions. He might also admit that he has a bias against short stories, but note that you've done a lot in so little. I might agree with him that you could add more, but awesome happened with what you did.

I just sort of realized that you and I (stop me if I'm being presumptuous) are writing for the mood of a story. That pleasing mood of a dark feeling when you read it. Stronger when you write it. Neither of us seem to care about conflict and soap opera set-ups, our writings both seem more obsessed with more of just that mood. And often without a real resolution. Just explaining the emotion, not fixing it. Agree? I'm being too presumptuous?

Well done on the story...but it really could have a little more in it...but that might just be my writing class brain-washing me.

Re: Really fucking nicely done.

[testsubjectspaz]

Actually, I wrote this in ten minutes during class. It actually is a really good story, but my style isn't up to usual standards. Still, thanks for liking it!

Re: Really fucking nicely done.

[splinterofchaos]

If you don't think your style was up to standards, we're both using completely different rubrics. Which makes sense because we both have completely different literary references.