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jadyuu October 21 2009, 22:32:42 UTC
Nice characters ! (I thought : Man, if cops could all be so handsome -_-)
I just posted a coment on your chapter 2 and I wanted to see your character file^^ This pics are perfect !

I was wondering is Jajeoong is gonna stay this slutty all the fanfic ? XD Don't misunderstand me, I love Jaejoong like that XD it's just that strangely I feel like Yunho is feeling more for Jaejoong than simple lust. of course Jaejoong seems like we would choose sex over Yunho XD (and that's a part of the game, right ? ;) ) and it's just the beginning of the story (long or short story ?). When Yoochun got Jaejoong, Yunho nearly jumped out the van to save him, so I figured just a little about Yunho's feelings. Aaah, I love when fanfics are like action movie *o*

Sorry for this boring post ,but I wanted to support you ^^

I will be reading your fanfic ~

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teal_wolf October 21 2009, 23:00:13 UTC
Thanks. I know, if cops were as hot as Chun and Su, I'd be getting myself arrested every day ( ... )

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jadyuu October 22 2009, 00:28:23 UTC
oh yes, please, add me ! <3

I'm writing fanfics too (in french, not in english XD I'm totally not fluent XD) so I understand that coments are very importants and I'm always comenting fanfics that deserves it, like yours^^
Please, just don't abandon your fanfic, I'm always growing fond of good fanfics, checking every weeks if the story has been updated or not, and 50% of the authors, one day, decide to forget their story... Please don't do that >_<

Your plot seems really good and I'm happy that Jaejoong may settle down, I think that two things are really important in a story :
-1/ Action. in my opinion if the reader find a chapter boring, the author mind lost the reader. So, action it is !
-2/ Characters evolution, of course ^^.
Those two points are linked, because the characters's evolution can be done because of "actions", right ? If something important happen, it can change people mind definitly...

Ah, I like talking about your fanfic^^ Please, add me and I will add you back !

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teal_wolf October 22 2009, 00:54:31 UTC
Cool, are you French, or just in a French speaking part of the world? (If you don't mind me asking.) I live in England, but I'm from an Irish family and never class myself as English, lol. Your English seems fine to me. If you ever did write English fics, you could just get a native English speaker to check it over (I would if you ever wanted me to ( ... )

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jadyuu October 22 2009, 21:54:30 UTC
A added you back :D
I'm totally french^^ I live in Paris alone for my studies. And I don't mind, feel free to ask everything ^^ I think that one day I will write a fanfic in english, but it will take a loong time XD

So your name is Sinead ? Hey, your sentence in french is very good ! My turn : "Bonjour, je m'appelle Jade, j'ai 21ans, ça va ?"
Well I'm a little like you, I spent 7 years doing spanish at school, I understand when someone is talking to me, but I CAN'T SPEAK XD

*o* Yes, WRITE ! *bad girl*. Seriously, I can't wait for your next update, and tonight I gonna tell your story to my friend. I love telling story =)

Yes, sometimes I read fanfics and I think "OMG, this is sooo boring". I hate that.

See you ~~

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teal_wolf October 22 2009, 22:48:05 UTC
I visited Paris once when I was younger. I went with my aunt and two brothers for a weekend.

Yep, I'm Sinead. Bonjour Jade! Je vais bien. Et vous? (I just got that off google :P it makes me feel clever pretending I can speak another language, haha.)

Eek! I haven't started the new chapter yet! I'll go do that now...

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jadyuu October 22 2009, 23:04:19 UTC
ha, Paris is my first love ^^

Yeah, google is my best friend too. Well I have to say something, french is really difficult, even for French o_O

OMG, you have to write or I'm gonna die because of frustation XD

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teal_wolf October 25 2009, 23:41:40 UTC
Yeah, google owns my life, haha.

Lol, French is hard for French?

It's been a few days since I updated. I've been unwell these past few days so I haven't really been on my laptop, but I'm working on the new chapter now. (Hehe, I'm having fun at poor JunSu's expense right now)

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jadyuu October 25 2009, 23:50:54 UTC
Lol, It's easy to speak french, but there is also the "beautiful french" which is more beautiful but very difficult to speak with a lot of nuances and difficult words... not for me XDD

Oooh, you're working right now ! good luck ! *wait*
Poor Junsu, what are you gonna do ? XD

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