Shards of Spirit: Mirror to Oblivion

[tasogaretaichou]

OMGOMGOMG Finally got the first chapter of Shards of Spirit written~!!!! Some of you may have heard me rant about the fic I've been wanting to write for awhile, the one that's similar to The Cell or a twisted Alice in Wonderland, well this is IT, people! Hope you enjoy it, it's gonna get nice and dark and juicy

Comments

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[hokuto_sensei]

Wow.
I'm holding my breath to wait for more.
And Yoruichi going "Kisuke. Kisuke would know what to do. He always seemed to." is love. Urahara, that sly, devious, wonderful geta-boushi guy, always has the answer to everything (well, most things).

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[tasogaretaichou]

Oh yes, Kisuke always has the answers. ^__^

[kane_shi_megami]

O_O I'm intrigued. I can't wait for more.

[praysforluna]

Pretty good man. I didn't see any mistakes either! Is this from the ver recent manga like chapter 269? Or is it when Grimmjaw put his hand through her stomach?

One thing that bothered me was your layout. It's cool but it pushes the writing onto the right side. For some reason that bugs but you don't need to change it. :P

[tasogaretaichou]

It's referring to when he had his hand through her stomach, but also loosely to the time after that when he nearly cero'd her in the head.

[orochimaru_han]

As always I love your writing, it's got an almost detached feel to it, like your on the outside looking in and able to see all the different character's insites. It all flows together really well, and the wording isn't repetative even when restating something to get a point across.

There was one paragraph near the end that switched to Yoruichi's perspective, and that threw me off since the entire thing was Ichigo.

Otherwise, loved it, can't wait for more.

[ruukii]

oww...so sad TT___TT can't wait to see more from you soon!!