FIC: Sojourn (Poetry Challenge)

[tarnationawaits]

Title: Sojourn
Author: tarnationawaits
Pairing: Remus/Ron
Rating: PG (Warnings for pre-story non-graphic character death, angst)
Notes: Written for stellamaru’s Poetry Challenge.

And this is why I sojourn here
Alone and palely loitering,
Though the sedge is wither'd from the lake,
And no birds sing.

--Keats, "La Belle Dame Sans Merci."

Comments

[jenish]

*sniff* Oh, that was so beautiful. Sad and poignant, and such a good description of grief. The characterisations are excellent throughout this.

My favourite passage is Remus went on this way until dusk fell, beginning again the next morning, and the next. Ron arrived each day, and stood in the same place as Remus stood with him, holding him gently and weaving memories with words. His stories were scattered at first, snapshots and moments that sprang most easily to mind, but slowly his telling evolved into a rich and winding tale, beginning from the moment Remus had first laid eyes upon Harry as an infant, and then again as young man on the Hogwart’s Express, continuing through his short but eventful life. It was no epic account of a hero, because to those who had known and loved him, it was not about the Boy-Who-Lived, not the hope of the wizarding world, but Harry. Just a boy turned man who unconsciously messed up his hair when he was thinking about something, and had an insistent and insatiable sweet tooth, and swore when he was angry.

It sums up everything I love about Harry, you really captured his essence there. And then, the bit at the end when Ron says “Only when I close my eyes. Then I see him laugh.” is so uplifting.

Marvellous. *sigh*

[tarnationawaits]

Thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it and that it had emotional impact. And thanks for the awesome feedback, I really appreciate when people point out specific areas that worked.