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Win It

Jun 03, 2010 15:51

Title: Win It
Rating: PG-13 (swearing)
Pairing, Characters: Jesse, Rachel
WC: ~2370
Warnings: Spoilers for the end of Funk
Summary: "You need to win at Regionals" A reworking of the final St.Berry scene of Funk.

( Jesse's stomach drops out when he sees her running towards him a bright smile on her face. )

pairing: jesse/rachel, fic: glee, fic: win it

Comments 14

motylik June 3 2010, 20:23:55 UTC

This would have been a much better ending. I don't get it. Why feed us the crap about Jesse really caring for Rachel and only doing it for Shelby and then have him be so cruel to her? It doesn't add up. I hope they talk at least a bit next ep, since most of their stuff was cut from the Gaga ep.
I'm going to pretend this is how it ended. :D

fromthebrain June 3 2010, 20:28:47 UTC

Thanks for the review... i doubt we will get a talk or explanation in the finale. i'm hoping for deleted scenes on the dvds to explain away the shitacular writing of JsJ now at the end.

anyways thanks again.

motylik June 3 2010, 20:35:11 UTC

I wouldn't mind if he was evil, if it was clear that he was evil. And yes, if we are seeing this from Rachel's POV, she will never know for sure either, so I guess we're getting the same non-closure, but STILL.

Btw I just realized, Rachel spying on VA alone seems like an even ballsier move now than last week, since that was supposed to happen after she got abused by their whole team. And it makes sense why she had back-up once the team found out she was doing that. Now I kind of like Mercedes and Quinn for not letting her go alone again even more. :) And as she was approaching her mother, there was a look towards Jesse, I'm sure. They cut it so you see her look at VA, but not who she was looking at. Stupid Fox.

Ugh, sorry for this monster of a comment. LOL

fromthebrain June 3 2010, 21:03:34 UTC

I agree with you on the fact that if they wanted to make Jesse evil they should have stuck with that from the beginning, shown that to us a little.
I don't think we are seeing this from any POV only because if it was from a (main) characters we wouldn't have gotten that scene of Jon and Idina in the car. But if they say its supposed to be from her POV it's taking the easy way out of a bad situation.

Yeah i need to rewatch with the eps in the right order and with all missing scenes to make sense of the continuity fail.

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ms_bnda June 3 2010, 21:18:24 UTC

i REALLY wish this was how it happened!!
i'm SOOO freakin' mad about this episode!! UGHH!! the writers need to get it straight: either Jesse's good or he's bad. Dont let us fall in love with him (and i HAVE fallen in LOVE with Jesse St. James!!) only to break our hearts with out-of-character actions like that!!!
i mean, did you see HIS face when Rachel was getting egged?? He DOES love her!! ugghh!
... sorry for rambling!! i just have A LOT of problems with Glee right now.

great fic! love it! =) lol.
(oh, and am i the only one that wants Vocal Adrenaline to win because of intense love of Jesse?)

fromthebrain June 3 2010, 21:26:12 UTC

Thanks for reading and reviewing.
I was mad too and i knew that St. Berry had an expiration date i just wish that it would have been handled better like VA loses and Jesse focuses on his future at UCLA so he and Rachel break up because they know it won't last while he's away.
Anything so that his character could be brought back and no one would hate him.

I think VA deserves to win, they are the better choir and they have always proven that. I kind of want to go back to the first nine eps where VA wasn't the enemy just the choir that ND strove to be like.
But it's glee so you know its going to go to ND.

ms_bnda June 3 2010, 21:51:23 UTC

i know!! i liked when VA wasnt the enemy too!!
gosshh!! freakin writers!!

VA SOOO deserves to win, i mean, i LOVE New Directions, but c'mon, let's be realistic!

bombottosa June 3 2010, 22:05:10 UTC

I loved this SO MUCH!!!! Jessie hitten by eggs with Rachel in the parking lot and choosing her over VA, their intentions of working on the relationship, it's exactly what should've happened on the show!!!!!

fromthebrain June 3 2010, 22:12:34 UTC

Thanks for reading and Reviewing... i'm glad you loved it.

amaya_7 June 3 2010, 22:50:18 UTC

It's really amazing, i read it again and again!
Will you continue this?

fromthebrain June 3 2010, 22:56:41 UTC

Thanks for reading it so many times.
No i think im leaving this as a one shot... for it ties up everything nicely and at the same time allows for there to be more to it.

whaterikadid June 4 2010, 00:31:00 UTC

i loved it!
it would've been the perfect ending... at least it makes sense!
last episode they just threw everything, they didn't care if it made sense or not - and NOTHING made sense!!
Jesse was acting like a completely different person... where's cute Jesse from Hell-O, Dream on? The one that told Rachel she deserved epic romance, the one that told Shelby not to hurt Rachel, because he was kinda liking her.
seriously, i still can't believe it happened.
And watching Journey's preview makes me ship even more St Berry - that look they give to each other must mean something! Even though she kisses Finn, Jesse's her soulmate!

Sorry for the long comment, i just had to get it off my chest! haha
But seriously, good fanfic! I hope to read others written by you soon!

fromthebrain June 4 2010, 01:16:01 UTC

I love long comments the explain so much and i find they are a great way to sum up how much the episode was filled with suck.
Yeah I will always picture Jesse in Dream On as the soul mate to Rachel in the end. Because they just fit with each other because they can stand to be around each other without wanting to set themselves on fire (love that puck line).
I hope that look they give each other means something, at least that way the whole pairing wasn't just a fail on the writer's part.

I have one other St.Berry fic, it's a total AU. It's called The Truth Is. It focuses around Jesse and a certain Brittany line. Check it out and let me know what you think.
I also have a chunk of a future!fic oneshot for St. Berry that I hope to have finished before the weekend is over.