Gift of Exile Chapter 23

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Sorry about the long wait for this chapter!  This and Chapter 24 center around the progress of Ennis' and David's relationship. Ennis will move into still more uncharted territory after that, and hopefully these chapters won't take as long as this one.

This and Chapter 24 center around the progress of Ennis' and David's relationship. Ennis will

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[coffeecustard]

Your story is head and shoulders above every other single BBM fan fiction work I've read, and the ONLY story about Ennis moving on that I've found worthy of reading. Everything else is either too naive, too hurried, too forced, too painful for me... Your storytelling is mesmerizing and that's an understatement. Please never stop. I wake up every morning hungry for a glimpse at Ennis's new day and I will until I die; your chapters are the only thing that give me that. It's also helped incredibly with my ache over Heath Ledger's untimely passing and Jack Twist's heartbreaking murder. I hope we get to see more of Jack as your story unfolds. I miss him so much although like many I'm Ennis's girl. If you decide there's no more Jack though, I can tell you this: After being skeptical about David's introduction and everything related to Ennis moving on, I now know better. I trust your take hundred percent -- I find myself thinking "she knows what's best for Ennis." It hurt a little at first to imagine somebody out there knows Ennis better than I do, but it's true.
May I suggest another story I'm really hungry for as well? I formed a Facebook group urging Annie Proulx to give us a much MUCH longer version of Brokeback even though it'll probably go nowhere. How about you try that someday? It will be exquisite if you write it. I can't begin to tell you how much I long to read paragraph after paragraph inside Ennis's troubled head, how much he longs for Jack before the first postcard and then in between their meetings after that... Passionate, affectionate, caressing reflections that never escaped Ennis's head. Maybe even scenes where Jack's asleep and Ennis is taking in his features knowing that he was going back to Riverton the next day... And I know you can also take us into Jack's head... Maybe his longing, both the emotional and the lustful side to it... Many more scenes like the fireside one where Jack tries to coax loving words out of Ennis. Countless passionate meetings between the two. You get the idea.

Whatever you do, please keep it coming and never stop. Your chapters are the closest thing we have to Heath Ledger and Jack.

You are wonderful.