Story changes and additions
Just so i dont cause confusion these are changes i made in my story that i am writting these are peices taken from the story most are not relavent to the one above it but you can try, if the characters are not named then there names are next to it. tell me what you think!
Kestrell: “Alexia’s mom, I helped her clean, since she broke her vase” her mind laughing at the thought it was strange to think that an adult could make such a mistake. Mrs. Jensen nodded and walked away with Kestrell right behind her.
“Isn’t that what I just said?” asked Kestrell sarcastically. “No!!! Take credit for what I say!!!”
“LIAR!!!” cried Kya out of sheer impatience. You see, he knew that Kestrell had an ear ache because he was secretly an Elf. He always wore his brown hair just long enough to conceal his ears.
Kya: “Are too. I know because I’m an Elf. I mean… no I’m not!!!” Now it was his turn to not look into her hazel eyes.
“What about them?” asked Kestrell. As she was looking into the water her lips formed a perfect “O”, and then her jaw dropped open. For besides her hazel eyes and her reddish brown hair was a change that until now went unnoticed by anyone.
“That was a fire shield,” replied Kya. “It was very good for the first try. We shall have to practice after school ev…” He broke suddenly. “wha? Oh no! Mhmm….. Mhm. A terrible thing has just happen at the Elven Kingdom, the one thing that gives elves their power has been stolen. I have been requested to go back and receive training for battle. I have asked for you to go back to the Kingdom with me. My request was granted. We are going to the Kingdom of the Elves.” His changing blue eyes full of worry and determination.
Kya was almost aware that some one was watching them that’s where the aura was coming from. Somehow he was right and it watched as they walked inside the cave and grinned an evil grin that could strike fear into any man dead or alive.
As darkness filled the cave it followed them into the cave and watched with purple eyes of hate until he thought they where asleep, then it started to come closer and closer until Kestrell woke up.
“I speak both!” Said a voice that had come from the dark elf. “You speak like I am not here! I watched you come in and heard you speaking of many things. Now to fight for you are in my territory BOY!!!”
Then Kya shouted. “Before we begin the fight, may I know the name of my opponent?” As if he were reading Kestrell last thought.
Faolan: “Yes! Since it will be the last you will ever hear! My name is Faolan meaning wolf! And this wolf would like to start this its hunt!! I already I know your name! Kya right? Now if that is all we shall begin the hunt!”
Kya :“Desperate aren’t we? Why is it that you want to go there? You betrayed the Elven Lord what else do you want?”
“I want to see the Kingdom and my friends are still within the Kingdom…” murmured Faolan.
“You are letting a women order you around? How pathetic! I can’t believe I lost to you!” Said Faolan noticing what just happened.
“Yeah well you did besides she is my friend so back off!” Screamed Kya
Faolan put the clothes on silently with out complaint but looked reluctant to do so. Later on around breakfast time Faolan did not eat what Kestrell and Kya offered him instead he went hunting and came back fifteen minutes later with a dead beaver. Faolan looked at it like he was going to be sick even though he was the one who had hunted it.
Kya: “Ah, Kestrell now’s a good time to start your training. Healing spells since I’m pretty sure that you do not feel like leaving Faolan I will teach you one that will heal this up for a long time. Say Tanka harwar! Then point to Faolan’s bandages!” Kya said. Faolan was about to protest but it was too late.
Faolan Thoughts: If I stagger they will think that they are right about the whole healing thing so I mustn’t do that! I don’t want them to think that they are right. I must not stagger!
“Fine! What should we do? We have a low chance. We’ve got an untrained half-elf, a drow who is stubborn, and me who has no idea how to fight a weather mage. Put that against the mage and wolf demon.” Finished Kya who for once was losing his cool over battle.
Chapter: 2
Well met!
Kestrell looked around her and took in the scene. The wolf demon had circled around the group and told the weather mage. They were fighting in a storm. This storm had arrived just as the weather mage spotted the trio. Faolan had ruthlessly attacked the wolf demon from the start. Then Kya sent a burning spell right to the weather mage
Kestrell: “Alexia’s mom, I helped her clean, since she broke her vase” her mind laughing at the thought it was strange to think that an adult could make such a mistake. Mrs. Jensen nodded and walked away with Kestrell right behind her.
“Isn’t that what I just said?” asked Kestrell sarcastically. “No!!! Take credit for what I say!!!”
“LIAR!!!” cried Kya out of sheer impatience. You see, he knew that Kestrell had an ear ache because he was secretly an Elf. He always wore his brown hair just long enough to conceal his ears.
Kya: “Are too. I know because I’m an Elf. I mean… no I’m not!!!” Now it was his turn to not look into her hazel eyes.
“What about them?” asked Kestrell. As she was looking into the water her lips formed a perfect “O”, and then her jaw dropped open. For besides her hazel eyes and her reddish brown hair was a change that until now went unnoticed by anyone.
“That was a fire shield,” replied Kya. “It was very good for the first try. We shall have to practice after school ev…” He broke suddenly. “wha? Oh no! Mhmm….. Mhm. A terrible thing has just happen at the Elven Kingdom, the one thing that gives elves their power has been stolen. I have been requested to go back and receive training for battle. I have asked for you to go back to the Kingdom with me. My request was granted. We are going to the Kingdom of the Elves.” His changing blue eyes full of worry and determination.
Kya was almost aware that some one was watching them that’s where the aura was coming from. Somehow he was right and it watched as they walked inside the cave and grinned an evil grin that could strike fear into any man dead or alive.
As darkness filled the cave it followed them into the cave and watched with purple eyes of hate until he thought they where asleep, then it started to come closer and closer until Kestrell woke up.
“I speak both!” Said a voice that had come from the dark elf. “You speak like I am not here! I watched you come in and heard you speaking of many things. Now to fight for you are in my territory BOY!!!”
Then Kya shouted. “Before we begin the fight, may I know the name of my opponent?” As if he were reading Kestrell last thought.
Faolan: “Yes! Since it will be the last you will ever hear! My name is Faolan meaning wolf! And this wolf would like to start this its hunt!! I already I know your name! Kya right? Now if that is all we shall begin the hunt!”
Kya :“Desperate aren’t we? Why is it that you want to go there? You betrayed the Elven Lord what else do you want?”
“I want to see the Kingdom and my friends are still within the Kingdom…” murmured Faolan.
“You are letting a women order you around? How pathetic! I can’t believe I lost to you!” Said Faolan noticing what just happened.
“Yeah well you did besides she is my friend so back off!” Screamed Kya
Faolan put the clothes on silently with out complaint but looked reluctant to do so. Later on around breakfast time Faolan did not eat what Kestrell and Kya offered him instead he went hunting and came back fifteen minutes later with a dead beaver. Faolan looked at it like he was going to be sick even though he was the one who had hunted it.
Kya: “Ah, Kestrell now’s a good time to start your training. Healing spells since I’m pretty sure that you do not feel like leaving Faolan I will teach you one that will heal this up for a long time. Say Tanka harwar! Then point to Faolan’s bandages!” Kya said. Faolan was about to protest but it was too late.
Faolan Thoughts: If I stagger they will think that they are right about the whole healing thing so I mustn’t do that! I don’t want them to think that they are right. I must not stagger!
“Fine! What should we do? We have a low chance. We’ve got an untrained half-elf, a drow who is stubborn, and me who has no idea how to fight a weather mage. Put that against the mage and wolf demon.” Finished Kya who for once was losing his cool over battle.
Chapter: 2
Well met!
Kestrell looked around her and took in the scene. The wolf demon had circled around the group and told the weather mage. They were fighting in a storm. This storm had arrived just as the weather mage spotted the trio. Faolan had ruthlessly attacked the wolf demon from the start. Then Kya sent a burning spell right to the weather mage