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In This World and the Next Chapter 9

Jan 14, 2014 01:21

It's been a while, I know, but I'm back. I can't make any promises as to a schedule, but I'm hoping to get cracking with this and Hogwarts Overexposed over the coming year.

Also, if you haven't already, check out A Perfectly Ordinary Nightmare: I wrote it as a reaction to the first chapter of ITWATN. It's basically how that set-up would pan out if ( Read more... )

epic fail, onion slicing convention, paedofinder general, informed wrongness, expospeak, luna is ooc, completely nonsexual, i can has characterisation, pov!fail, reading the books is a good idea, fucking self-awareness how does it work, sexism, literally painful to read, pointless wittering, metaphor fail, badfic:in this world and the next, sentences are not minivans, you fail feminism forever, hermione in name only, harry potter, said bookism, dumbledore is evil, continuity isn't optional, it's full of filler, wibbly-wobbly timey-wimey stuff, passive voice

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sith_droideka January 14 2014, 03:08:22 UTC

Okay, at least in KiP they didn't knock down the Burrow. Well, Lord Potter didn't knock down the Burrow.

On a side-note: as I've mentioned on tumblr before, I'm trying to write a spitefic crossover using Lord Potter as the main villain. But writing it has caused me to realize something: I have no idea what to do with Hermione. Luna's easy. She doesn't do anything. She stands there and looks pretty. Hermione does much the same thing, but she does more than Luna (not that that's hard...) and after eighteen years I'd expect some of Hermione's original characterization to come forward, only... warped and twisted, since the currency of PISS is power and someone like Hermione would probably be one of the best players at that game once all her humanity and empathy are removed.

But the question is, what does that amount to? How does Lady Potter think and act, compared to canon Hermione or KiP!Hermione, or even ITWATN!Hermione? Hermione here does pretty much nothing, just act like a 50s housewife (with less agency) whereas I want Lady Potter to be as credible a villain as Lord Potter or Lord Longbottom. What to do, what to do...

On a final note, I love how somehow ITWATN is worse in one chapter than PISS is for most of the story. At least at this point, Luna still has something to do. But considering ITWATN 11...

szaleniec1000 January 14 2014, 03:20:01 UTC

You might want to read some dark!Hermione for ideas. I don't have any recs, but I know there's a fair bit out there.

sith_droideka January 14 2014, 03:36:56 UTC

Maybe. I want to keep the characters acting like they would, given the passage of time, but Hermione and Luna didn't have enough personality or agency to see what they would do since they didn't really do anything besides Banishing the leftover Horcrux goop or threatening Bellatrix.

Ironic, from a series known for its powerful ladies, to say the least...

szaleniec1000 January 14 2014, 04:10:09 UTC

It's interesting because the author seems to be sympathetic to the idea of strong female characters but fails miserably in the execution.

sith_droideka January 14 2014, 05:14:13 UTC

Yeah, he had an attack on wizarding Britain as being supposedly misogynist (not that that really matches with the books, but I digress...) and I'd say that Emma is probably supposed to be some sort of action girl-esque character without being just a man in a dress, but when your female lead's actions basically all consist of doing whatever her supposed equal orders...

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sith_droideka January 15 2014, 09:09:11 UTC

That might actually work. I'm not sure if even KiP!Hermione would let herself act like she's the inferior to Lord Potter, even if she technically is, but her acting very Umbridge-esque would fit in with how Dan and Emma act in it (blood quills and everything).

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