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Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 19 part 2

Jul 09, 2011 14:21

Of course fake!Hermione isn't dead. We're not getting rid of her that easily.

( Hogwarts Exposed Chapter 19 (NSFW) )

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sickbritkid2 July 9 2011, 17:51:04 UTC

"America?"

I don't get it...

Of course, I'm an American, so...

I'm guessing it was because that guy was talking like an American?

szaleniec1000 July 9 2011, 19:55:51 UTC

The word "someplace", though not as blatant an Americanism as it used to be (but still enough that Firefox's EN-GB spellchecker doesn't recognise it) still looks a bit out of place here.

tony_branston July 9 2011, 19:59:14 UTC

Or that.

sickbritkid2 July 9 2011, 22:34:32 UTC

Uh-huh...

Bleh, just wait until the wedding chapters, in which Hermione and Harry probably have the most American wedding Great Britain's ever seen...

szaleniec1000 July 9 2011, 22:43:46 UTC

I read ahead out of morbid curiosity, and I see what you mean.

sickbritkid2 July 10 2011, 00:08:14 UTC

Yeah. It annoyed me because the details of a traditional British wedding are a Wikipedia search away!

szaleniec1000 July 10 2011, 00:59:59 UTC

Exactly. And it's not the kind of obscure detail you can expect people to overlook: with the UK having the second largest number of English-speaking internet users, you are bound to have some readers who have been married in the UK or attended someone else's wedding there.

sickbritkid2 July 10 2011, 02:46:32 UTC

Yeah. Still, the UK!Fail pales in comparison to what happens after the wedding...

tony_branston July 9 2011, 19:58:15 UTC

I'm assuming it's the guns.

szaleniec1000 July 9 2011, 20:08:42 UTC

Though there is an awful lot of gun!fail in fiction set in modern Britain, here it's a bit more plausible because there's a lot more people with access to legal guns (rifles and shotguns, anyway) in the countryside, such as farmers and gamekeepers.

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