Wounds: Temperance

Sep 06, 2010 02:21

 My (just in time) entry for the Seven Heavenly Virtues Challenge. Not very satisfied about this, and I have to admit it was very difficult to write, with Temperance being such an encompassing concept. I might redo this challenge in the future. *shrugs*

the response to this piece surprised me, it really did, and I am thankful for everyone who read ( Read more... )

media: fic, character: anders, challenges: seven heavenly virtues, character: amell/surana

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little_befu September 5 2010, 19:26:36 UTC
Temperance is a bitch. It's so vague in it's very nature. It's abstinence, but not really. It's moderation, but not really.
You did very well though. I think the key point one has to display in Temperance is the ache that comes along with denying needful things. You set that up well, letting us into Alistair's head space then hit us with this bit:
"Alistair had never done anything so hard in his entire life.
He stopped himself from brushing his lips against her brow.
He let her go.
Again."
That "Again." is gorgeously heart-wrenching.
Whoa, this comment got a bit ramble-y, but I could talk about temperance for hours.
So in summary, yay! You did well. ^_^

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caelaillu September 6 2010, 16:11:38 UTC
yes, it is a bitch, i referenced your drawing from the former round for temperance to help me out. seeing alistair in templar armor gave me a better idea but it would have been a lot longer and wouldn't make the deadline.

good job on that btw, loved the butts and the boobies XD

thanks for saying i did well when i half-wanted to chuck the whole piece. *sigh* if i had more time, i would have written something else. but thank you so much!

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little_befu September 6 2010, 17:55:43 UTC
Oh, pish posh, no one ever thinks they do well. Particularly when they do well. ^_^
You should revisit temperance though. Without the time constraint you'll probably feel more comfortable with it, especially if you already have an idea.
Thanks about my piece. :D T&A for the win!

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femalegamer September 7 2010, 16:38:14 UTC
I agree with what others are saying, and really, if you want to work on the longer piece, I'd be happy to link that one in as well. These are intended to be inspirations, not straitjackets.

It's a fine line with Temperance between healthy moderation (versus unhealthy lack of balance and obsession) and being indecisive and lukewarm about everything. Good job.

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caelaillu September 9 2010, 02:22:14 UTC
*blushes* thank you for saying so.

all right, I'll finish the other one (in time >.<) and I hope all of you won't mind Alistair as Knight Commander and Neria as first enchanter XD

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