My (just in time) entry for the Seven Heavenly Virtues Challenge. Not very satisfied about this, and I have to admit it was very difficult to write, with Temperance being such an encompassing concept. I might redo this challenge in the future. *shrugs*
the response to this piece surprised me, it really did, and I am thankful for everyone who read
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You did very well though. I think the key point one has to display in Temperance is the ache that comes along with denying needful things. You set that up well, letting us into Alistair's head space then hit us with this bit:
"Alistair had never done anything so hard in his entire life.
He stopped himself from brushing his lips against her brow.
He let her go.
Again."
That "Again." is gorgeously heart-wrenching.
Whoa, this comment got a bit ramble-y, but I could talk about temperance for hours.
So in summary, yay! You did well. ^_^
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good job on that btw, loved the butts and the boobies XD
thanks for saying i did well when i half-wanted to chuck the whole piece. *sigh* if i had more time, i would have written something else. but thank you so much!
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You should revisit temperance though. Without the time constraint you'll probably feel more comfortable with it, especially if you already have an idea.
Thanks about my piece. :D T&A for the win!
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It's a fine line with Temperance between healthy moderation (versus unhealthy lack of balance and obsession) and being indecisive and lukewarm about everything. Good job.
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all right, I'll finish the other one (in time >.<) and I hope all of you won't mind Alistair as Knight Commander and Neria as first enchanter XD
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