Comments | swamp_ariadne: Pictures Don't Lie

swamp_ariadne

Pictures Don't Lie - Inception fanfic (2/?)

Oct 20, 2010 02:54

( I'm waiting for a train... )

pairing: cobb/ariadne, noir, character: dom, au, character: ariadne

Comments 7

I'll just keep doing this shit... thursdays_girl October 20 2010, 07:04:34 UTC

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Re: I'll just keep doing this shit... swamp_ariadne October 31 2010, 16:47:13 UTC

have i told you how noir this looks? and the picture... is still developing (yes going back to polaroid and film allegories).

Re: I'll just keep doing this shit... thursdays_girl October 31 2010, 19:37:13 UTC

Not as good as my usual work but thank you. I love pulp art (hence my icons).

Glad to hear you're still developing this one!

gruskek October 23 2010, 10:40:59 UTC

I'm still liking it :) The plot is thickening ;)

I've noticed two tiny mistakes you ought to fix:
"You’re former financier" - it should be "your"
"you could have put one of the most powerful crime families in America behind bars if you didn’t stop." - it should be "hadn't stopped"

squinty squinty swamp_ariadne October 23 2010, 13:53:02 UTC

thanks for noticing! i actually had to kinda squint to find these. don't you just hate typing dyslexia?

Re: squinty squinty gruskek October 23 2010, 14:04:40 UTC

You're welcome :) Yep, I do, my typing is pretty bad and I have to double-check everything I write.
Next time ask Cobb to squint for you, he's the expert ;)

vampy_wolfy October 25 2010, 03:03:31 UTC

I think I got confused...I probably did it myself. So Ari is Saito's ward, and she was engaged with Fisher, but broke it off, all while working with Miles. Fisher kidnapped her(or did she see something that made her run away? I was a bit confused at that part...), before she was supposed to do an extraction demonstration. And now Cobb and Arthur have to go find her, right? I like this story a lot, even though I get confused. I can't wait to see more!