Well, not the situation, exactly, I mean the way you told it, the language, the attention to detail. Like for instance:
She couldn't tell him then. He had her locked in his muscular embrace so tightly she thought she'd snap in two if his arms were any shorter. As it was, every breath she took drove her chest into his, with the nipples getting so tender now.
I don't know, that's just such a great use of imagry, and it's not cliche at all. And this part:
Even here, safe in the circle of his arms, he could switch and decide to kill her at any moment, if it would put him closer to those kills.
gives me a nice little chill and I just...find it lovely. And the last line is so elegant and simple...Maybe I'm deviated. It's not a fluffy, pretty fic, but it feels real. *shrug*
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She's crying, he's an ogre, she gets beat up in front of Anzati... it was really difficult to write, actually. But it sticks to canon.
But then, parenting is no fun a lot of the time either...
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She couldn't tell him then. He had her locked in his muscular embrace so tightly she thought she'd snap in two if his arms were any shorter. As it was, every breath she took drove her chest into his, with the nipples getting so tender now.
I don't know, that's just such a great use of imagry, and it's not cliche at all. And this part:
Even here, safe in the circle of his arms, he could switch and decide to kill her at any moment, if it would put him closer to those kills.
gives me a nice little chill and I just...find it lovely. And the last line is so elegant and simple...Maybe I'm deviated. It's not a fluffy, pretty fic, but it feels real. *shrug*
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