Birthday Fic!

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Is there another story similar to this? I've never actually read it ... huh ... interesting. I haven't read Clex in a long time, as the ship hasn't appealed to me in a while. but oh well. If it's not too similar, I'll be happy.

I'm glad to see it works for you though! Thanks for taking the time to read & review!

[babydracky]

WOW!!!
I like the idea that Clark and Ollie have a child together! XD I generally don't like it in stories but well... Kon really IS Clark and Lex's son... So why not Ollie and Clark's son, isn't it?^^
I'm pretty sure the baby is beautiful^^
(And as always Clark doing the worst thing to do, making the worst choice XD)

And my, I would sure laught if I saw a Batman carrying baby's stuff XDXDXD

Can't wait to read the second part!!!^^

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Yeah, I know Kon is Lex and Clark's son by means of a lab experiment. But I didn't want Lex in the picture so I figured Ollie would be a much better choice.

And the baby is beautiful. I mean, look at his parents! ;)

Clark is such a martyr ... we all know that. LOL

And isn't that a funny image? The Dark Knight carrying a baby bag would make me laugh too.

Thanks for taking the time to read & review!

[anonymous]

If you ever intend to improve your writing, you have to stop to issue the whole backstory as one big clunk of text. Let the reader figure things out, you don't have to have Clark remember his whole life story at the beginning of every one of your AUs. I like reading your stories, but if I have to read a long introspective paragraph on how Clark finally figured out that things were not going to work with Lana ... ARRRGH.

You need to: (a) trust the reader can get the major points of the backstory from your story, and (b) introduce the finer points in a more sparse and subtle way.

[anonymous]

Theresa is right, I always forget to sign my comments. (BTW I'll have you know this is about to end :-)

Jeremie.

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I usually go with flashbacks to recreate what happened in the past but sometimes, it is just easier to lay it out there. :\ I had my doubts when I was writing the back story, especially when it took more than a couple of paragraphs, like I originally intended but I just decided to keep it in there. it's never really caused a problem with anyone before.

Thanks for your constructive feedback ... I will try not to emphasize so much on the back story in future fics. Can't say it will go away completely but it will lessen dramatically.

thanks for taking the time to read & review.

[tmelange]

I was just reading your comments...don't you hate it when people leave anonymous "concrit" without having the balls to sign their name? That's really a punk-ass thing to do. And even if their crit is valid, the fact that they left it anonymously undermines the validity of the comments. This is exactly why I turned off anonymous commenting in my journal. Who the heck needs two cents from some unnamed person? LOL

Anyway, great story. Very interesting premise. I particularly liked the flashback scene where Clark and Ollie got together. Of course, having Bruce in the fic always throws off my OTP-meter, but I'm learning to deal. LOL

Bravo!

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i don't mind anonymous comments but i just want an e-mail address or SOMETHING to get in touch with them. :\ i know some points are valid and i had my doubts when i was writing the back story but I had to do it. I'll try to be more careful the next time around.

I'm so glad you are enjoying this fic. You know flashbacks are pretty much trademark of my stories. ;)

And I knew the Bruce part would drive you mad but I like having him around. He's fun and the Superman/Batman dynamic makes me all happy inside.

Thanks for taking the time to read & review!

[tmelange]

You told me yourself that comments from France are rare. Seeing as my IP address never changes and I sign half my comments ... I sometimes figure I'm not that anonymous at all!

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are they really that rare? i know two people on my flist for certain who are from france. :\