Heartburn - Chapter One

[sventastic]

Title: Hearburn
Info: One Piece fanfiction (previously titled Lambency)
Genre: Slightly romance and comedy, but I could be dead wrong.
Rating: Fluffy...?
Pairing: SmokerxAce
Summary: Smoker decides to follow a tip Ace gives him about a rogue Devil Fruit user wreaking havoc on a small island on the Grand Line.  However, her powers cause some problems for

Comments

[popkin16]

Interesting beginning! I can't wait to see if she manages to brainwash Smoker or not (my guess is that his will is too strong, but his crew's will won't be). XD

[sventastic]

Thanks! I'll start writing the second chapter xD I'm terribly slow...

[popkin16]

Yay! Looking forward to it :)

[talismanic_fire]

absolutely wonderful ficcy ^_^
i wuvs ur writing ^w^
can't wait to read more XD

[sventastic]

Thanks, I'm glad you like it.

[smoky_fire]

I don't know what to say. So... worst at first?

How could you remind me at paperwork?! ;____; ... I done it know, even if you could finished what you wrote. Argh - I wrote reports for around 10 month... and every month had about 4 reports! I know how Smoker must feel... ;_;

But aw! It was very good. I like the way in which Smoker is so pissed off... XD
And I also like your Ace. But there's just one thing you could do better - let Ace be... just a little bit less childish. Everything other: sounds interesting! X3

[sventastic]

Okay, I promise I'll make Ace a bit more mature.

...

Wait a minute. xD

No, no that's sound advice. He DID turn out a little too "wheeeeee" but I'm too tired to fix it. Besides, if it ticks off Smoker it's all good xD

Sorry about the paperwork by the way. Didn't mean to traumatize you.