SushiFic Challenge Completed!

[homespunfic]

I finished my sushific challenge! Just, ya know, a couple of months late. terimaru assigned me to write a Mal & Zoe story, including the words "bathtub" and "contraceptive". Yeah, I know.

So here it is. This takes place during the wonderful "Just Another Day in the Black" by the lovely and talented isha_libran

Comments

[elizalavelle]

This is lovely! You did a great job with the Zoe/Mal friendship and with Mal's internal dialogue. A pleasure to read :)

[homespunfic]

Thank you! I do love Mal & Zoe.

[goldy_dollar]

How do you get their relationship and their voices down so well every time?

This was soooo good. Engaging from start to finish, with a really nice internal monologue from Mal. He's older, less bitter, and you demonstrated that perfectly.

I especially liked your tie-in with Zoe and Wash's wedding.

“A bath - Zoe, you sayin’ I don’t smell pretty?”

Heh!

You write lovely dialogue. I'm awed. Even Wash sounded perfect in that flashback.

*memories*

[homespunfic]

Aw, thank you thank you. Only took me months and months, with those Sushi Women lookin' over my shoulder, so I'm glad it was worth it. I just love hearing them all talk.

[blugreendreams]

Awww. ::love::

This was just what my poor stressed writers blocked soul needed.

It was wonderful.

Hee-hee, manicure. Must be something in the air.

“Not today.” Zoe shook out the coat and draped it on the chairback. “Got direct orders from a woman, said the man she’s marrying wears a brown coat.”

So pretty.

Inara accepts, Mal regrets, Zoe heals...perfect.

Thank you!

[homespunfic]

Hee, Slither icons.

And yes, that's right, you've got the manicure story! (*must go read now*)
I'm glad I could help your writer's soul. I know that need. Thanks for the lovely comment.

[isha_libran]

Wow. This really does tie in perfectly with the story, down to the shirt and the rings and everything. I also really like your explanation for Mal's brown coat, it was just something I'd written automatically, it's amazing that you put this spin on it. Very nice!

I love the Mal-Zoe interaction in this, so true to canon, and the voices were spot on, which is pretty difficult, in my opinion--Zoe is difficult.

Also, I love that Mal wonders about his mother dragging him off to the bath, he seems more wistful and nostalgic about it now, rather than bitter and melancholic, which is good.

And finally, “I also gotta eat off that dining table every day.”

Ha. *G* I guess it's now an official M/I fanon thing, isn't it? The sex-on-the-kitchen-table thing?

Great stuff, as always. =)

[homespunfic]

Oh, good, I'm so glad you like it! Because it's fanfic of your fanfic, isn't it? So I had to make sure I conformed to your canon. I do think Mal is less bitter, and that makes us happy for him.

Ha. *G* I guess it's now an official M/I fanon thing, isn't it?
And I wouldn't be able to tell that by your icon, huh? :)

Thanks very much.

[ohvienna]

I really loved this. Everyone's already beaten me to what I wanted to point out as most excellent, so I'll just second it all. :D

Great job with the voices, jumping into Mal's head there, and this exchange:

“Oh. You know, that looks fine, but I can’t…I got that other coat…”
“Not today.” Zoe shook out the coat and draped it on the chairback. “Got direct orders from a woman, said the man she’s marrying wears a brown coat.”
Mal looked at Zoe and back to the coat, not trusting himself to find the right words.

is just wonderful. Great read, thanks. :)

[homespunfic]

Thank you for commenting! It's always gratifying to know it was a good read. :)