Fic: Nice Shot

[phoenke]

Title: Nice Shot
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Comments

[jeedai]

Okay. Very very cute.

[jeedai]

That came out not as enthusiastic as I meant it. I really loved this story.

[phoenke]

Yay, thank you!

[kitoky]

Gah. I just love, love, love how this started out all serious and dramatic and then it did a sharp turn for a spider. So cute. You write wonderfully for English being your second language. =)

[phoenke]

Yep, that's what I was going for. All dramatic and scary in the beginning and silly in the end. My mission is also accomplished. Thank you! *hugs and kisses your review*

[maaike_fluffy]

(Let's keep it in English, shall we? For the sake of the others... ^^)

I was wondering the whole time what it was she was hunting... my first bet was a mouse or rat, but then I remembered Reepicheep... he wouldn't take kindly to having his family killed, me thinks. *lol*

The last two lines were perfect. Caspian is just too in love with her to scold her...

[phoenke]

Yes, let's keep it English :-)
Funny you say that, I couldn't decide which animal to use at first. I thought about a mouse too, but then I thought of Reepicheep as well :) I was thinking about using a cricket or cockroach (let's be honest, no one likes a cockroach) but then decided to use a spider, because that just made it so silly. Thanks for the review! Glad you liked it!

[kiyousei]

ROFL.. i love the twist at the end XD

[phoenke]

Thanks, glad it gave you a laugh :-)

[muselives]

XD! Humor FTW! My constructive criticism (and I pray you, receive it as such for I enjoyed this fluffy goodness) drop one of the "I may be King of Narnia..." because you use the "I forgive you my Queen" to make clear they're together. Just my suggestion! Take it or leave it :D Good piece!

[phoenke]

Your constructive criticism was well received. How many kisses do you want with that hug? Thanks for the suggestion, I will edit this in my journal when I find the time.