Whites of the Eyes || Drabble Challenge #3: White

[victoryonwings]

Title: Whites of the Eyes
Author: Mai
Pairing/Characters: Caspian/Susan
Word Count: 257 words
Rating: G
Summary: The whites of the eyes had to be seen before Caspian could make his move.
Disclaimer: I own nothing.  Characters belong to C.S. Lewis.
Note: This drabble was written in response to the Drabble Challenge #3: White at

Comments

[kitoky]

Oh, too cute! I loved how it was written and the fighting theme. <3 Lovely!!! Whim or not, it was worth while! Great job!

[victoryonwings]

Thank you so much for the kind words! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[carpexnocturne]

Awwww adorable twist! Really nice job. ^^

[victoryonwings]

Thank you! I was worried that the twist was way too obvious, making the story really corny, but I'm happy that you liked it!

[maaike_fluffy]

You know 'white of the eye' was the first thing I thought of when I read the prompt, but I couldn't make it work. *applauds you* very cute!

[victoryonwings]

Very cool. I wanted to use the "white of the eye" theme in a more serious tone, but it seemed to forced. So I went with the cute route and ended up with this drabble. Thanks for reading, and I hope you enjoyed it!

[chatonelle]

*laughs at Caspian*

hormonal ahaha. So cute :P

[victoryonwings]

You know how boys are...

I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[defying_reason]

Oh that was lovely!

"Caspi-,"

I sure do hope he doesn't take that as a nickname. Haha.

I love how Caspian's mind worked in this one, felt like prey/predator.... very interesting.