Breakdown
So yeah, my first fanfic ever. It's actually the first story I've managed to write at home in six years or something ...
The story popped into my head after reading a story called Tears and watching people make fun of Yesung on every episode of EHB and almost every show I've seen him/them in ._.
Please read and tell me what you think ^-^
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The story popped into my head after reading a story called Tears and watching people make fun of Yesung on every episode of EHB and almost every show I've seen him/them in ._.
Please read and tell me what you think ^-^
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hmmm, where to start, where to start... how bout at your characterization :D! haha, call me biased but i love it when the suju members get overprotective of sungie xD it gives me a warm, fuzzy feeling inside and you... YOU perfected that perfectly lol. i loved kyu btw haha omgosh, i loved him in this so so much xD
“That text is a waste of our time,” he said loudly, ignoring the poisonous glares from Heechul and Kangin and the shocked looks from the rest of the members ( ... )
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and I love it when the members get overprotective about Sungie too! <3 (the whole makes-me-feel-they-care-about-him-and-not-just-make-fun-of-him-thing ... and I'm totally biased too xD) The reason I made this was because I wanted more of that "protectiveness" but couldn't really find much ._.
and yeah, I just had to add that Kyu-part xD he couldn't be all serious and stuff throughout the entire fix, it's evilKyu we're talking about >:D
again, thank you for reading, commenting and liking :D (though I never came close to perfecting anything xD)
(oh, and if I were you, I'd choose to comfort Sungie, you could always go find the one who made him cry another time xD and who knows if/when you'd get another chance to comfort *cough*touch*cough* Sungie? :D)
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"Yesung looked at his members with uncertainty, but before he could even think anything, two pair of hands grabbed his, and he looked up to see Kibum smiling at his left and Kyuhyun smirking at his right"
I think I just imagined a 3OTP as KyuSungBum xD I would soooo ship that *-* *adds to 3OTP list*
Oh and Kangin in this fic.. *sighs* I so miss that boy. It made me sad seeing him in this fic lol ;>
And why is your english better than mine?XD I was surpriced lol ;> No offense offcourse <3 but it's really good, I would say you are from england if I didn't know any better <3
Should keep writing you, I am expecting more fics from you starting today! Specially KyuSung stuff offcourse XD
HelenE Hwaiting <3 ~
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About the line, I didn't realize the Kisung and Kyusung had snuck in until the fourth time I re-read it or something xD (Kyusungbum, I'm gonna ship that too xD :D)
I'm looking forward to Kangin comes back ... I'm a pretty new ELF, so he had already enlisted when I got into Suju, but watching shows like EHB and Intimate Note, I can't wait for him to come back :D (and I saw this adorable 2woon-vid once >.<)
And it mean a lot that you think my English is good :D I was so worried about writing in English, 'cause I'm kinda crazy about grammar / grammar mistakes and stuff and I didn't want to write/post something that wasn't "correct" o.o (maybe all the English books I've been reading the last few years have been useful after all xD)
And I don't know if I'm brave enough to write/post another one, it took me about two weeks from when I finished writing this fic til I dared post it here o.o But if I write another one (I do want to >-<) Kyusung will be there whether I meant for it or not so ... I'm not even thinking ( ... )
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And rofl, yeah 2woon is really adorable XD I used to love that pairing, but missing Kangin too much now.. Hope to see 2woon moments again when he returns! Hopefully Yesung didn't enlist in the army yet when he gets back. He should go around that time I think ;.; 2012 atleast. *sighs* *depressed*
And if you are crazy about grammar.. DO NOT READ MY FICS! Since my grammar is pretty much screwed up xD I get to happy about writing that I forget to keep an eye on the grammar xD
And You are brave enough, I will make you brave enough :3 KyuSung readers will love it! I know I will :3 Btw, what I forgot to say. You like to make Yesung suffer don't you?XD Me too in fanfics (sorry Jongwoon <3) well.. but I actually kill him.. Omo I feel like a bad writer rofl.
Anyway, going offtopic here :P Np, loved to read it, so thankyou for writing it :D
*poofs*
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I'm hoping for some 2woon moments when Kangin comes back too :D they seem so comfortable together, while I think Yesung still looks awkward with some of the members xD (or they just don't know how to treat him xD) I hope he's not enlisting before 2012, I need time to prepare ;__;
And hah! I've already read your fics! >:D *evil laughter* ... and I didn't notice any "screwed up"-part(s) at all xD
... *hiding* ... well, I guess I do kinda like to make him suffer ... but only so he can get THAT much happier in the end xD No sorrow, no joy (or something xD) (and I think my fics might all be unconsciously angsty, if I ever write more o.o ... I'm probably and angsty person xD)
Thank you ~
*poofs away too* xD
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I seriously loved it !
The relationship between members...awww...
Leeteuk is such a perfect leader, and the group hug is so... T^T
You should have told me before about this fic Helene ♥♥♥
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I'll tell you if I (ever manage to) write another one? *-*
thank you again, love you <3 *: (>-<)
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It was kinda sad cause I feel bad about this stupid text ;~; but aside from that, it was totally cute ♥ how the members were cheering Yesung up, it was adorable.
I'd like to be there and hug Yesung. ♥ This guy really deserves to be loved by everyone. ♥♥♥
"Kangin suddenly grabbed the cell phone from Heechul and threw it at the nearest wall, effectively breaking it."
I would have done the same thing if I was there èé
Btw, your english is perfect ! ㅋㅋㅋㅋ ♥
I really loved your fic, I hope you'll write a new one soon :3
I love you Helene ♥ :D
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(I'd like to be there and hug Yesung as well ♥) and he does <3
I might've done something similar, if maybe not quite as drastic xD (stupid text D:)
and my English is far from perfect, but thanks again <3 I try xD ♥
(and I currently am trying to write another one >.< we'll see ^-^)
love you too! >_____< ♥♥♥
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