seeing a post from you is one of my guilty pleasures.. =) i just can;t resist clicking on the link and indulge myself.. lol
first of all, i love the fact that this fic shows asami's POV.. it's been a while since i've read anything portraying his thoughts.. and as usual, i'm blown away by how you interpreted him and his idiosyncrasies..
in the first part, although it's a bit scary that the thought of harming his lover came to mind, my heart can't help but reach out to asami when he resisted and pulled back, horrified at the realization of what he was about to do... that scene portrayed how much he cared for akihito even subconsciously... no matter what happens, there's still a factor that will stop him from really hurting his lover.. i love that.. =)
the torture scene was beautifully abstract.. though i wouldn't mind seeing more pain and suffering (i'm curious as to how you interpreted the 'beastly' attributes of asami), the way you constructed the scene still managed to convey the pain inflicted by asami for the reason that he wanted to.. or because he was asked via a contract or because he simply had the impulse to do so.. i didn't feel that something was missing despite the 'deleted' stuff .. XD
third, i was holding my breath when asami phoned kirishima,... i was afraid that you're gonna kill him off... i'm amazed as to how you crafted a supposedly terrifying atmosphere into one that bubbled of 'friendship'... no word was wasted between them.. i definitely felt the care of kirishima not only towards asami but to akihito as well.. and of course, asami's deeply felt gratitude touched me greatly... i love the 'friendship' between those two..
and lastly, i swooned at your final scene... i was expecting some hard and rough sex to calm asami's frazzled nerves... but wow, you surprised me again with this caring side of asami that he only shows to his lover.. i had to laugh at akihito's wriggling.. hahaha... for me, that is akihito's signature move whenever asami displays any type of affection e.g. hugging, cuddling... it was adorable... asami was content to just lay there and hug akihito but aki had to be adorably cute that asami can't resist.. XD needless to say, i was happy and had my 'squeeeeeeeeeeee" moment at the end!
thank you for sharing this ! looking forward to more fics from you!
Wow, thank you. My fic isn't worthy of such a comment LOL!
I know a lot of people don't like writing from Asami's POV. I just love it. It's so interesting and fun to be in his head. I'm sure that many don't agree with how I write him, but he's so mysterious that there's a lot of stretch room for people's interpretations. :)
*nods* The first scene told him at first he needed release. Later he saw that it also told him he needed to stop. Akihito broke his ability to enjoy this 'sport'
The torture scene, it was just too much the other way. I could not have redeemed him if I'd dragged the reader through what I had originally. I was making him irredeemable to me, so I knew I was going in the wrong direction. Because of that I wanted to make it hazy, occasionally punctuated with dialogue that would bring the pain home. I found that Asami tenderness is what made it hurt the most for me. :(
The Kirishima scene was a very tight one to write. I wanted no spare words. They just are not those kind of men, so I tried to make each convey a lot. It was challenging but the most fun of all the parts. (I wasn't sure Kirishima would live when I first wrote it either!)
I'd originally thought about sex, but it felt very wrong here when I tried to write it. The whole torture scene was sexual to Asami, so I wanted him to seek something else from Akihito. And in the end, it was OK, because he said no, and only turned to him physically for all the right reasons.
Wah I usually don't sit and think about my fics after they're done. Thank you for thinking enough of it to give it your time and thoughts. ^__^
first of all, i love the fact that this fic shows asami's POV.. it's been a while since i've read anything portraying his thoughts.. and as usual, i'm blown away by how you interpreted him and his idiosyncrasies..
in the first part, although it's a bit scary that the thought of harming his lover came to mind, my heart can't help but reach out to asami when he resisted and pulled back, horrified at the realization of what he was about to do... that scene portrayed how much he cared for akihito even subconsciously... no matter what happens, there's still a factor that will stop him from really hurting his lover.. i love that.. =)
the torture scene was beautifully abstract.. though i wouldn't mind seeing more pain and suffering (i'm curious as to how you interpreted the 'beastly' attributes of asami), the way you constructed the scene still managed to convey the pain inflicted by asami for the reason that he wanted to.. or because he was asked via a contract or because he simply had the impulse to do so.. i didn't feel that something was missing despite the 'deleted' stuff .. XD
third, i was holding my breath when asami phoned kirishima,... i was afraid that you're gonna kill him off... i'm amazed as to how you crafted a supposedly terrifying atmosphere into one that bubbled of 'friendship'... no word was wasted between them.. i definitely felt the care of kirishima not only towards asami but to akihito as well.. and of course, asami's deeply felt gratitude touched me greatly... i love the 'friendship' between those two..
and lastly, i swooned at your final scene... i was expecting some hard and rough sex to calm asami's frazzled nerves... but wow, you surprised me again with this caring side of asami that he only shows to his lover.. i had to laugh at akihito's wriggling.. hahaha... for me, that is akihito's signature move whenever asami displays any type of affection e.g. hugging, cuddling... it was adorable... asami was content to just lay there and hug akihito but aki had to be adorably cute that asami can't resist.. XD needless to say, i was happy and had my 'squeeeeeeeeeeee" moment at the end!
thank you for sharing this ! looking forward to more fics from you!
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I know a lot of people don't like writing from Asami's POV. I just love it. It's so interesting and fun to be in his head. I'm sure that many don't agree with how I write him, but he's so mysterious that there's a lot of stretch room for people's interpretations. :)
*nods* The first scene told him at first he needed release. Later he saw that it also told him he needed to stop. Akihito broke his ability to enjoy this 'sport'
The torture scene, it was just too much the other way. I could not have redeemed him if I'd dragged the reader through what I had originally. I was making him irredeemable to me, so I knew I was going in the wrong direction. Because of that I wanted to make it hazy, occasionally punctuated with dialogue that would bring the pain home. I found that Asami tenderness is what made it hurt the most for me. :(
The Kirishima scene was a very tight one to write. I wanted no spare words. They just are not those kind of men, so I tried to make each convey a lot. It was challenging but the most fun of all the parts. (I wasn't sure Kirishima would live when I first wrote it either!)
I'd originally thought about sex, but it felt very wrong here when I tried to write it. The whole torture scene was sexual to Asami, so I wanted him to seek something else from Akihito. And in the end, it was OK, because he said no, and only turned to him physically for all the right reasons.
Wah I usually don't sit and think about my fics after they're done. Thank you for thinking enough of it to give it your time and thoughts. ^__^
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