[Fic: Durarara!!] The Stuff of Legend

[summer_sierra]

Title: The Stuff of Legend
Character(s)/Pairing(s): Shizuo/Celty + Izaya
Rating: PG
Warnings: none
Summary: They dance a fragile two-step in the city’s limelight.  He watches, intrigued, from the sidelines.
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Comments

[ibuberu]

Oh my, this wins because it is ShizuoCelty, and a very wonderful one at that. I fell in love with the flow of the fic, from the people watching, to just the two of them, to Izaya scheming in the background. The last few paragraphs were very well-handled, especially the way you crafted Izaya's thought process. The cute scene between Shizuo, Celty and the camellia was very sweet too - surprising, because they were so wonderfully in character.

If anything, I like your writing style and the wide range of vocabulary used, but do watch out, you may be overusing too-complex words for readers to understand - try more moderation with these words. It's really just a suggestion on my part. Because at some places, it really was lengthy and hard to grasp what was trying to be brought across such as 'A mere lovers’ sunset stroll through the park has never before triggered such a paradoxical incongruity of awe and fear stamped so plainly on the faces of the self-proclaimed “jaded” denizens of Ikebukuro'. I do actually get what you're trying to bring across, but for me to pause and think for a moment - what does paradoxical or jaded mean? - it breaks the enjoyment of reading somewhat, understanding is key to what leads to a reader gaining satisfaction from the story. ♥

Otherwise, I really don't have much concrit to give, excellent work

[summer_sierra]

First of all, thanks so much for taking the time to leave such a thoughtful comment! I really appreciate it.

I completely understand (and agree with) what you've written, since it's an issue I usually have to negotiate when I write. Truth is, not only had I been stuck with writer's block for a while before writing this fic, but once the words started flowing (rather over-enthusiastically, apparently), I also ended up writing the majority of it in the early hours of the morning, which is a recipe for issues like this. Next time around, I'll mind that nagging impulse to keep everything in moderation. :D

Thanks for reading! I'm glad it was at least enjoyable, despite the vocabulary mumbojumbo. ♥