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turtlecrackers May 1 2011, 22:23:54 UTC
Oh wow. Harry can't even try to picture Ron in his mind without Hermione butting in, and then he goes directly to think more about her. Not to mention that Ron just gets called "impetuous" and there's mention that he fights with Hermione, while Hermione gets "genius" "best friend" and "beautiful".

I am so sick of the abusive Dursleys already. They're definitely not the greatest people in the world, but they're not THAT bad. And the author makes Harry look bad by breaking everything the Dursleys value. There's no point to that.

Good luck with this story. =]

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lurkythespork May 10 2011, 23:11:51 UTC
Erm, unless I misremember, the Dursleys were very big on appearances. Even if they were inclined toward direct physical abuse of a child, they wouldn't want to risk it.

And an untreated third-degree burn over a large portion of skin? Do you want to know, Suethor, how long it would take for that to get infected and threaten the life of the injured? Nice little trip to the ER and then we get to explain to the nice doctors just how it happened?

I think not.

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Correction's datacraver July 15 2018, 07:57:08 UTC
If I remember correctly Kinsfire didn't have the extra text in bold print in his story. So please fix it or knock it off.

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ext_5248749 January 22 2020, 22:26:38 UTC
Okay, four things. One: I HATE OVERLY-ABUSIVE DURSLEYS! Every single HP badfic writes them like this. It doesn't make Harry more sympathetic, it just makes the readers roll their eyes, like I'm currently doing.

Two: Why doesn't Harry just go to Madam Pomfrey when he gets to Hogwarts, so she can fix his hand? If she can turn Cat-Hermione back into a human, and regrow bones, I'm pretty sure healing a burn would be a piece of cake for her. Oh, wait, I know. It's another source of WAAAAAAANGST.

Three: Why can Harry only write choppy sentences in the first paragraph of his letter? He seems to write the rest of it just fine.

Four: Where did that fireplace suddenly come from? Unless the sporker left out a couple of lines that said he went back to the house, or broke into someone else's, that last bit implies that he found Floo powder and a fireplace on the side of the road somewhere.

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