'curiosity etched on her' [correct spelling of 'curiosity' and change 'on' to 'onto']
'weighing heavily on her and' [add 'mind' after 'her']
'roll her eyes at that.', 'topics such as that.' [having 'at that' twice so close together is repetitive. Change the second one to 'what Z'neth had discussed with her'.]
'Besides, listening to one of the other ladies at the table discuss the fabric of her newest dress...' [This sentence doesn't make sense here. Either add 'it was a better topic over' before 'listening' or just take it out or rewrite it.]
Depends on which version of spellcheck you have. Color and colour are both proper words, but different versions of spellcheck will insist one version is wrong.
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'weighing heavily on her and' [add 'mind' after 'her']
'roll her eyes at that.', 'topics such as that.' [having 'at that' twice so close together is repetitive. Change the second one to 'what Z'neth had discussed with her'.]
'Besides, listening to one of the other ladies at the table discuss the fabric of her newest dress...' [This sentence doesn't make sense here. Either add 'it was a better topic over' before 'listening' or just take it out or rewrite it.]
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Yeah, that last bit where her thought trails off - I'll rework that one
Thank you ever so much!
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Welcome!
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(and hopefully, this will sate the bunnies until I'm ready to work on the Jekyll and Hyde 'verse fic)
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