[fic] Mistletoe {鋼の錬金術師: Roy/Ed; PG-13}

[strawberrykaoru]

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[strawberrykaoru]

XD That was in the summer!

[strawberrykaoru]

XD; Well, it's up for public view now.

[wicked_pistil]

I really enjoyed this! Very adorable and your Mustang is so slick. ;)

I especially liked this detail:
Ed heard a sound of approval emitting from the older man’s throat.

This was great, especially for your first fic! I can't wait to read more from you. :)

[strawberrykaoru]

Thank you! ^_^

I tried to make them stay IC. o.O

Believe it or not, I had to scroll back up while wondering "where did you get THAT sentence?" XD; Just proves how long ago my idea was jotted down.

XD; Thankies again!

[astizya]

Cute! I love how Ed and Roy steal a kiss in public while all dressed up. ^^ And I agree with wicked: that line is a very nice detail. It's subtly hot and quite sexy. =D

Critique-wise, I'd say the single quotation marks around Ed's thoughts are unnecessary since the story is from his perspective anyway. To me, they seem to interrupt the flow. ^^;

Anyway, overall, I really enjoyed your fic. I hope you write more FMA!

[strawberrykaoru]

Heehee, their relationship is in a risky situation, so why not add to that? XD I'm glad you like the touch. ^^

Ooh, my line has been dubbed subtly hot and quite sexy. Score! =D

Hmm, true. I think I'll do a teeny bit of revision to it afterwards. ^^

Thank you! And there are some more on the computer, I'm just too lazy to finish them at the time being. XD

[timchell]

Yea, Ed's outburst was a bit awkward. XD

But this is a really great start for you as an author! (You shoulda seen my first...Terrible it was. XD)

Roy Mustang fully enjoyed the effect his words had on the younger man.

Me too Roy, me too. ^_^

UBER GLOMP LUFFS ON YOU!

[strawberrykaoru]

^^; I have to work on that, ne?

Link me to your first! XD

*ish uber glomped luffed* Thankies! ♥

[timchell]

lol the more recent ones aren't much better. XD

this is my first ever fic. zomg. =p

http://www.livejournal.com/users/timchell/2224.html

[strawberrykaoru]

XD Aww, don't say that!

And that's not bad! Even though I don't watch Bleach. XD; I like the sweater part. LOL.

[inutsuki]

Very nice! It was a bit jolting with Ed's outburst, but overall, I think this was excellent. Kudos! =D

[strawberrykaoru]

=D Thank you!

I guess I'm just not that great at writing Ed and his ability to take insults in regards to his height. XD

[zalia]

Awwww, so cute ^___^

Lovely Christmas fic!

[strawberrykaoru]

Thanks hun! ^_______^