I wrote this, tell me what you think.

[stratamajor]

BREAKING NEWS

The news is breaking.
Great stacked heights of close-set type are clicking importantly against each other, and
Activating like a set of tumblers -- spilling down onto the beach
In a cascade of ink and heated metal.

The steely letters catch a fierce glint of sunshine
As they jostle to the crest of every wave
And -- finally -- hold for just a

Comments

Well, I love it!

[fishant]

Two things really pop for me...

Very distinct images appeared in my mind - unambiguously visual!

I wanted to keep reading to find out what happens... There's a story line - more than an emotional snapshot. And yet it's an effective emotional snapshot.

Bravo, I say.

[myalterego09]

well you are a very talented writer my friend.

by the way--go on www.kinderpics.smugmug.com our amazing pictures from the kids co reunion are up...haha

[animameus]

Ok, obviously I love this, so I won't comment any further. But can we discuss the "creative cat" icon drawing the rainbow overhead?