Some words.

[stoda]

So... here's a bit of Skyrim fanfic... though hopefully it works well for people who haven't played it, or just plain don't play games at all.

Critiques welcome.

Comments

[kosamiargi]

I like it!

It's also, hmm...it's less descript than some of your other works, at the same time. Though I suppose if you're truly playing it up as a 'fanfic' for the fans, that probably wouldn't have been necessary anyway.

You mentioned that it was a lot about a cat with a love for Moonsugar, and while you started off getting into that, I almost feel like maybe you could have kept the Moonsugar and Mead effects going even as she was heading out. If it made her feel dull going toward that battle, or even sharper. Something.

Whatever. It was a fun read, and now I almost want to do one.

[stoda]

Much thanks for the feedback! One disadvantage of being a writer instead of an artist - not a lot of people take the time.

I did think about emphasizing her stoned-ness a bit more, toward the end... I suspect the combination of Mead, Moonsugar and Adrenaline would produce a fairly crazy (and crazy-effective) kitty.

I wanted to avoid spending too much time describing any of the people - especially with fanfic like this, I'd rather someone who DIDN'T know the game could color the characters with their own preconceptions. Kirrsan might as well be a wolf-ish thing, for most of that... except for the almost-purring.