055 fic - Not So You'd Notice

[firefly124]

Title: Not So You’d Notice
Author: firefly_124
Rating: R
Word Count: ~1200
Prompt: 055 - romance free-for-all
Characters/Pairing (if any): Pairing is spoilery. Highlight to read: Buffy/Satsu
A/N: Spoilers for Buffy S8 comic #12. Title comes from a line in #11.

Comments

[deird1]

Very nicely written.

Lines I really liked:
She was not going to think about Satsu’s lips anywhere except where they were right now.

Where they were a second ago actually.

It was still nice when it was on purpose.

oh, now that was different

And then they were in … places …

she was pretty sure she shouldn’t be the only one getting the wow

Well done!

[firefly124]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it! I just had this compulsion to try to figure out how the heck they got from issue #11 to issue #12.

[rayruz]

I liked this. It made me feel immensely less... akward about the whole thing.

[firefly124]

Thanks! I really felt the need to figure out what had happened there. I'm glad it worked for you.

[ubiquirk]

I really like how Buffy's knowing Satsu loves her turned into protectiveness that led to this.

“If you want to stop,” Satsu murmured into her ear, “we should probably do it now.”

“That sounds like a good idea,” Buffy whispered back as she slid a hand under Satsu’s top. “Not the stopping. The other part.”

Hee!

Soon they were on the bed, clothes scattered everywhere, and Buffy didn’t have to imagine what it would be like to have Satsu’s lips in other places, because they were. And then they were in … places … and it was … wow.

Nice reprise of the earlier kissing line.

I also love the ending - you really go ahead and set us up for the humor of everyone finding out.

[firefly124]

I really like how Buffy's knowing Satsu loves her turned into protectiveness that led to this.

I'm glad to hear that! I just had to figure out how the heck they got from where they were in the last issue to being tangled up in the sheets together.

Nice reprise of the earlier kissing line.

Thanks!

I'm glad you liked the setup for the everyone-finds-out-immediately fiasco, too.

[kgola]

I really like how you filled in the gaps that the comic books left.

[firefly124]

Thanks!

[showmewrtr]

Definately like how you explored the whys of things. And loved some of your phrasing. Truly excellent.

[firefly124]

Thanks! I'm glad you liked it!