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[fic] Opaque

Jul 14, 2008 00:57

Title: Opaque
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ladylahatiel July 14 2008, 06:56:07 UTC

This is really nice. I didn't find it disjointed at all, I felt it flowed pretty smoothly from one part to another. All the different parts of Tony's life, a snapshot of each. And, having a soft spot for Jarvis, I love the last scene. Well done. :o)

tyleet27 July 14 2008, 07:03:08 UTC

I quite like it. : ) A lot of fics forget how screwed up Tony has to be after Afghanistan...that last drabble captures it perfectly.

pensive1 July 14 2008, 17:53:32 UTC

LOVE.

This was certainly not pointless! You did very well, showing the effects of Tony's time in a cave. I especially like the first and last vignettes. Very in-depth.

I am adding this to memories. :)

mask_of_glamour July 14 2008, 19:00:13 UTC

The last one was so touching and sad. I loved all of them though. Great job! =D

Emily

amonitrate July 15 2008, 00:24:08 UTC

oh, lovely. lovely. I especially like the idea of Jarvis talking Tony down in the last part.