Title: The Life One Does Not Lead
Rating: PG-13
Characters: Mohinder, Sylar
Words: 2950
Warnings: Off-screen character death, mention of sex
Spoilers: Through season 2
Disclaimer: Not my characters, not writing this for profit.
A/N: A million thanks to
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Yay! That is one of the things I was going for. In my mental image of the action, Sylar started this because he was excited over getting a new ability, and he was just experimenting on Mohinder out of curiousity. But then Mohinder's admission startles him into responding the same way (even though he tries to cover it up with a vaguely menacing parting speech).
I usually find Elle funny as an observer, but I was just annoyed by her here.*sigh* You know, the ending is the only part of this that gave me problems. I originally was going to leave it open-ended as to whether Sylar genuinely returned Mohinder's feelings, or whether he was just going to take advantage of them to control Mohinder. But when I started writing, I realized that there was no doubt in my mind about how he felt. Then I had a longer ending in mind, where Bob shows Mohinder the video and says that they can take advantage of Sylar's obvious feelings to control him. Mohinder would have been unhappy with this because he'd feel it ( ... )
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Really, great job!
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Ah! That makes sense. I was worried before I posted it that Elle's snarking might seem out-of-place, so my paranoia fueled my massively long explanation. (She just insisted on saying that, even though I gave her a look, too. But then, the last time I wrote about her, she turned out to be a slash fan...)
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I also liked the image of Mo's mom staring out the window, and the line about a quiet regret. I think that pretty much sums up the whole piece, right there :)
ETA - this line:
he realizes this isn’t a specific memory. It’s just a quiet regret over what he’s left behind.
:)
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