Following, Part Seven [Jack/Juliet] [R] [WIP]

[squeakyboots]

Title: Following (Part Seven)
Characters: Juliet, Jack, Charlotte, Daniel, Hurley, Bernard & Rose (so far)
Pairing: Juliet/Jack, hints of Charlotte/Daniel
Rating: R (sex, language)
Spoilers: Season 4
A/N:  Remember when I said I couldn’t write douche!Jack? It turns out that I was kind of just kidding about that. A slightly toned-down version of

Comments

[valhalla37]

Wow, this series is just so fantastic -- so glad you posted it to the comm!

I've now just caught up, and I love the way you've captured the developing relationship between Jack and Juliet (and Charlotte and Dan; my two favourite pairings in one fic, which is so unusual and awesome), and balance keeping the action moving along with the slowly unfolding interactions between all of them. I've got a soft spot in general for S4 fics, but I'm so intrigued by all the developments here -- why the operating room changes, what that sound and light meant, Juliet appearing in Charlotte's photo, how it ties in to the larger mythology -- and I can't wait to see where you take it!

[squeakyboots]

Thank you so much, both for your wonderful comment and for managing to get through the whole thing (I know it's already a marathon)! And I totally know what you mean about the dearth of J/J and C/D fics on the internet: part of the reason I'm writing this is just to give myself something to read. :)

My ideas about where I'm going with the plot are a little vague right now (it's so freaking hard to try to remember and make coherent all the loose ends on Lost), but I can tell you that I had meant for the sound and light to indicate one of the "flashes" like those that happened during S5. They're going to be a little different than they were on the show, but that's the general idea.

Thanks again for reading!

[matitablu]

I already told you in the previous chapter, but I'm really liking how you're handling the "what if?" part of this story. Makes me really curious about how it's going to end, other than giving me sweet wish fulfillment for Jack/Juliet :) Yay plot!

[squeakyboots]

Thank you, thank you! ♥

It's funny: the more I write J/J, the more I realize that one of the most enjoyable parts of their dynamic for me was that they worked well together (on surgeries, on coming up with plans, on missions through the jungle, etc.)--even on the show, Juliet and Jack were almost always advancing the plot in some way, so that the emotional dynamic between them didn't feel as "tacked on" to the main storyline as it did with some of Lost's other 'ships.

[matitablu]

My thoughts exactly. As much as I like the trope of opposites attracting, I just love ships that work well as a team, so to speak. You could tell why Jack and Juliet were attracted to each other because they actually had things in common, other than just generic chemistry.

[squeakyboots]

I love the phrase "generic chemistry" -- that's such an apt description of so many crap television 'ships, imo! :)

[nighttiming1022]

I could not love you more for writing this fic.

Your characterizations of Jack/Juliet and Daniel/Charlotte. (especially Daniel) are so wonderful. I can so easily imagine and see them doing these things and hear them saying these things.

And, one of the things I love best about your fic is how you describe the what the characters are feeling/what they are experiencing.

He moved slightly and felt the stitches pulling, wiring tight inside him. The pain was intolerable; he felt like a corpse.

feeling his anger recede like the tide

(there were more but these were my favorite). They paint the picture so clearly for the reader.

Douche!Jack was well done. I both loved and hated him in this chapter. And, I cannot wait to see where you go with your 'what if.'

So sorry to take over your comment space on this chapter, but I simply adore this fic ♥

[squeakyboots]

::hugs:: Don't worry at all about taking over the comment space: I love to hear from you precisely because you always give detailed, helpful comments. ♥ Thank you for that!

I'm so very glad that you thought douche!Jack worked here -- it took me forever to write and edit that section. Because I want to show Jack changing gradually and working out some of his issues in this fic, I was trying to get it to sound as much like Jack did on the show without turning him into the over-the-top insane d-bag he sometimes became during S4 (I always thought his fickle abandonment of Juliet in "SNBH" was one of the worst OOC moments for his character, but there were many others as well).

I can tell you, though, that as far as my fic is concerned, Jack is very sorry for acting like a jerk and will be charmingly repentant in the immediate future.

How's that for taking up the comment space? ;)

[dess_xo]

sweetie I'm going to read this story from the beginning, but sometimes I can't comment whit my LJ because of the 18+, haha (then I will log out; to read it..) but you know I love this! (by the fact I'm 100% suliet it's kinda hilarius)
xxxxx

[squeakyboots]

Oh--thank you! It's good to hear that you're still reading and enjoying it. I wish I could write a porn-free fic these days but I'm afraid I have opened Pandora's box and it's too late for me: the internet made me do it. ;)

[dess_xo]

haha yes I thought I should say something because I can't comment of the most, but please don't even wish you could because I kinda adore it haha
xxx