Springfic: "Family Ties" for slam_girl

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Title: Family Ties
Author: Midnitemaraud_R
Recipient: slam_girl
Character(s): Teddy, Luna, Harry, Ginny, baby James, Andromeda, Molly, and a naughty garden gnome.
Rating: PG
Word Count: ~6,100 words
Warnings (highlight to read): None
Summary: A new baby is said to bring blessings to a family; however, Teddy isn't feeling very blessed or happy about the situation.
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[sapphiretragedy]

This was delightful!

This part had me laughing like crazy:

But today he hated everyone, so he'd eyed the large plate of cakes with narrowed eyes and proceeded to methodically suck the jam out of each one, replacing all but one, which he stuffed into his mouth. He swallowed and quickly drank his milk to wash it down, and fled, sticky-fingered, out through the back door into the garden. Victoire loved Aunt Molly's jam cakes and she'd be furious when she discovered all the jam was gone.

Wonderfully done!

[midnitemaraud_r]

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Family Ties

[catsintheattic]

This was absolutely wonderful!

Luna was so funny - Do you have any unusual urges? - I'm still laughing tears!

But Teddy was simply great. Finally a young boy who doesn't sound all grown-up or overly cute! His fascination with dirt and gnomes, bad names and mischief felt so real. The same goes for his misery, and Harry dealt with it in just the right way. What a clever idea to ask Teddy to be big brother for James.

I completely enjoyed your story and the characterisations of everyone. Thank you for sharing!

Re: Family Ties

[midnitemaraud_r]

Hee! Well, considering her father's reaction when she got bit at Bill and Fleur's wedding, I figured she'd take quite an interest herself. :-P

The hardest part of writing this particular fic was keeping Teddy sounding like a child, and not an adult in a tiny body, so I'm glad it worked for you! Thanks so much for reading and commenting!

[djin7]

I think, in another life, you're a little lonely boy who has been usurped by a baby. I remember when my little brother came home, I was 5 and a half, and he was so awesomely adorable, but I still remember demanding my mom's attention - sometimes very loudly.

This Harry was very much the Harry I love - exactly how I would expect him to be around his godson and family, and I love LOVE IT. Also, Luna's cameo was awesome. She can even confuse little boys who have no sense, ahahaha! ♥ This made me smile, and I'm still smiling.

[midnitemaraud_r]

Hee! Oh man, I was a horrible big sister at first! I used to pull my sister's arms through the slats in the crib and bite them because I was so jealous of her usurping my place. :-P She's forgiven me though, so all is well. *g*

I love Luna! She could probably talk a tiger out of having her for lunch, loping away in a stunned sort of daze. I admit I'm very biased about how I think Harry would be as a godfather, but my bias totally suits him.

Thanks so much, hon! ♥ I'm glad you liked it!

[gryff_slytherin]

This is very emotional - cute and sad at the same time. I, especially, like how he says "He's not very good at listening yet, is he?" and "He ate my worm! I'll kill you, you stupid gnome!" Fantastic story! =)

[midnitemaraud_r]

Hee! Unlike Teddy, I'm rather fond of those gnomes. :-P

Thanks so much for reading! I'm glad you liked it!

[kennahijja]

Oh, beautiful! This made me sniffle at times, because Teddy's feeling of having become useless with James's birth is awfully sad in a way.

I loved Teddy's voice throughout - he's such a real little boy without any sanitising or sugar-coating (wow, the jam cakes!), and the way you sneak the real cause of his misery up on us worked superbly well. At first it just looks like bad mood or grumpiness (not helped by Andromeda, who seems more than a little overwhelmed by a less than easily-raised metamorphmagus, and his teacher, comparing him to his mother), but then we get to the core of things.

Luna was amazing, wrapping him up in her sort of absurd conversation which suits a child extremely well, and I *loved* Harry! He gets things immediately, and takes time to understand and console.

Teddy's introduction to James was hysterical (poor boy, but the way James greeted Harry was even funnier), and I loved the ending! Excellent job!!!

[midnitemaraud_r]

♥ Thanks, so much, Hijja! The biggest challenge was keeping Teddy a child, and not an adult in disguise, so I'm very happy that came through. Plus it was rather fun to write him as a little terror (albeit with a good heart in there somewhere!) Hee!

The way James greeted Harry was the same way my nephew greeted my brother-in-law, so I couldn't resist adding it in. :-P

Thanks for such a lovely comment! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!