Potterfic: Lost Time

[bennmorland]

Apologies to all requestors; this was spontaneous inspiration and not meant to snub any of you!

Author: bennmorland
Title: Lost Time
Rating: G
Genre: "fluff & sparklies!" and some angst, because let’s face it, it’s a bittersweet premise
Word Count: 803
Beta: Unbeta'd.
Notes: Inspired by a "drawbble"[/incredulity] by reallycorking, found here. The "drawbble"[/again with

Comments

[_littlun_]

More golden comments!!

"like a rabid hyena going through its time of month." ... now that's just plain genius.

"The light from the sky sang through her fair eyebrows like angels in the clouds." ... omg, how much does he love her? this really shows what a romantic fool potter is, if thats how u wanted to portray him.

"She sighed visibly then, and rested a hand on the back of Harry’s chair, tantalizingly, painfully close to his suited shoulder. His eyes alit for a moment on Ginny’s freckled fingers, their nails painted a pale pink, and the bracelet whose pearls fell with dull pings against the wood." ... I love the detail of this. You can absolutely SEE it in your mind.

"In moments, Ginny and Harry were one body, molded back into comfortable embrace. For three minutes Heaven opened up and enveloped the two in a shimmering purple fog of glorious wealth and contentment."...i love the bit about heaven opening up for three minutes .. so sad and true we only have heaven for a minute or two and then its gone.

"The memory of the scent of her drove him to near madness. He did not sleep in that small provincial inn, but stared out at the moon and wondered what might have been." ... love the ending because it REALLY REALLY makes you NEED to know what happens. In a way you totally feel the frustration and aching that Harry's feeling, it's great when u sympathise with the character. And it's so simply written, too, and i love simple writing. 'Better said in three words than in seven' - as my writing teacher says.

[bennmorland]

'Better said in three words than in seven' - as my writing teacher says.

"Brevity is your friend," saith my professor. :D

You've some idea, I warrant, how brilliant it is to get such wonderful and specific comments as you leave. *hug*

[_littlun_]

looks like your professor has more brevity than mine does!

Good writing deserves good feedback. Writers clammor to discuss their writing with others so if i have the time their is no reason why i shouldn't do it. Do onto others as i wish them to do onto you ... *cough* or whatever...

*huggles back*

[bennmorland]

I'm on top of reviewing your shtuff! Really! I am! *Is embarrassed by how little he keeps up with his friends' posts*

[_littlun_]

no worries.. i really wouldn't take too much notice of the thing i have on spoiled ink anyways. they'll be others (better ones!) one there this week. I just uploaded that one cos i felt i had to upload *something* ..

[bennmorland]

You're too good to me. :)

I will read it, though!