101: The Pilot

Jun 13, 2010 18:03


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Re: Safety is Relative 2/2 tahirire June 21 2010, 02:46:06 UTC
Lisa goes jogging early every morning, and she does most of her deep thinking then. It's been weeks since Dean showed up on her doorstep. He comes around a lot, but he's not ready for more than that, not yet.

She rounds a corner and passes Diane's driveway, tossing out a cheerful hello wave at her neighbor as she goes. Diane waves her over. She looks upset, and Lisa stops at the mailbox to see what's wrong.

"Lisa, sweetheart," Diane says, reaching out and taking both of her hands, "How have you been? We've all been worried about you."

Lisa smiles politely in spite of her confusion. Diane is the head of the neighborhood watch, and Lisa is getting a sinking feeling in her gut. "What do you mean?"

Diane leans in conspiratorially. "That young man that you've been ... the one with the black car?"

Lisa drops Diane's hands abruptly, crossing her arms and nodding. "His name is Keith," she states. "What about him?"

Diane looks flustered, as if she has said something wrong. "I'm so sorry, dear ... I don't mean to intrude, but ... I've known a few young women in the past who have gotten involved with ..." The woman actually looks pained now, as though she wants Lisa to read her mind instead of making her spit it out in plain English.

"Involved with what?" Lisa asks, her voice dripping intentional naiveté.

Diane's face flushes to match her hair. "Honey, men like him ..." She sighs, putting on her no-nonsense voice. "I've seen the bottles, sweetheart. I've seen that black car all hours of the night. I know he's living in a hotel. I'm just saying ... if you need anyone ..." she gathers up some courage. "You just call me and Tom, okay? Men like that ... they aren't safe."

Lisa counts to ten, surprised at the rage she feels in Dean's defense. Then she counts back down from ten and remembers that Diane is only trying to help.

She opens her mouth and finds that her throat is tight with emotion. She goes ahead and lets the tears swell to the edges of her eyelids. Why not.

"His name is Keith, and he's a cop. He saved my son's life. I owe him ... everything. And he just lost his partner, and he needs some time to deal."

Diane's eyes widen.

"You're right. He's the most dangerous man you'll ever meet. And there is no one on this planet I would rather trust my son's life to. So thank you for your concern, but we'll be fine."

Lisa pats Diane on the arm, pulls her headset out of her pocket and puts it on. She flips her iPod to Ramblin' On and goes on with her jog.

She doesn't look back.

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Re: Safety is Relative 2/2 borgmama1of5 June 21 2010, 12:07:35 UTC
Impressive that you came up with a variation on the 5.22 codas that was different!

I loved Lisa's answer to her neighbor!

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Re: Safety is Relative 2/2 tahirire June 21 2010, 15:03:10 UTC
*blinkblink*

I did? What was different about it? (I haven't read but like 3 5.22 codas, lol)

I think Lisa is a tough chick. :)

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Re: Safety is Relative 2/2 elliemurasaki June 21 2010, 13:15:33 UTC
Lisa's AWESOME.

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Re: Safety is Relative 2/2 tahirire June 21 2010, 15:04:52 UTC
She IS awesome. I like her. :)

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Re: Safety is Relative 2/2 tabaqui June 21 2010, 15:01:47 UTC
Oooooooh, oh oh. Yis. Damnit. I love Castiel as the cat who came back.... And yis, *different*. Ah, man - i've got my own coda rattling around in my head and you are going to *make me write it*.
*flails*

I love that he's *not* living there, and that she came looking for him, and that they both know it's not right, yet. Maybe never.
*sniffle*

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Re: Safety is Relative 2/2 tahirire June 21 2010, 15:06:48 UTC
LOL the cat who came back. So very true.

Ah, man - i've got my own coda rattling around in my head and you are going to *make me write it*.

Yay! Write away!!!!

Honestly, it never crossed my mind that he would just up and move in. I'm not sure why everyone seems to think he did. *ponderface*

I think that by the time Sam comes back he will have, of course. Just not that first day, not that first week - maybe not for a long time.

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Re: Safety is Relative 2/2 tabaqui June 21 2010, 15:08:52 UTC
Yeah, it seems a bit weird. I mean - yes, Dean's gonna keep his promise, but he's not totally blind, here. Lisa has a life and a *kid* - she's not gonna go 'whoo, yeah, c'mon in! party time!'

He still drinks like crazy, doesn't sleep, will have even *more* nightmares now....

*goes off to open Word*

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Re: Safety is Relative 2/2 ratherastory June 24 2010, 17:30:59 UTC
Oh, this was very nice. Go Lisa for defending Dean (even if Dean probably doesn't care about Diane's opinion).

:)

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Re: Safety is Relative 2/2 tahirire June 24 2010, 23:20:09 UTC
Hee. I'm glad you liked it. *more facepalm*

True, Dean most likely would not care - but on the other hand, Diane is probably a demon, so ... ;)

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Re: Safety is Relative 2/2 sweetdvl358 June 29 2010, 17:43:20 UTC
This story is so good. I like that Lisa's got a defense for Dean, and I love that Cas is still looking out for everyone. Awesome job! :)

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Re: Safety is Relative 2/2 tahirire June 30 2010, 00:51:53 UTC
Thanks! I think Lisa is a tough chick, and I'm glad she's helping look out for our boy. :)

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Re: Safety is Relative 2/2 windscryer August 7 2010, 18:22:04 UTC
And I thought the first part broke me... *cracks, then shatters*

You are far too good at this delicious angsty stuff. I know, this isn't REALLY angsty for you, but it's like... Cotton candy made out of fiberglass.

Sure it LOOKS all sweet and pink and fluffy, but when your swallow it down, it leaves little jagged cuts everywhere that ache inside you for days.

I love how Cas just can't leave it alone (even as I wonder if he regrets not being there to prevent it like Dean hates him for) and how Dean is all conflicted, but semi-tame in the face of people who insist on caring.

(I particularly like how Canon put him in this position of desperately seeking out a family to belong to. I can't help but think that he would have really wanted it even without Sam's poking and that was just the perfect excuse to go after it. He is SUCH a little pack puppy! *glomps*)

AND THEN THIS PART. GUH. *GLOMPLES LISA AND DOESN'T LET GO*

*confesses dark!sekrit* I have loved a lot of the girls they've had for Dean. (Not Cassie, but pretty much everyone else.) Lise, though, is probably my favorite. And this little vote of confidence in her just warmed my little heart! *tackles you too*

And now you totally make me want to try this comment!fic for myself even more.

I just need to find a good quote and I'll try my hand at it.

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Re: Safety is Relative 2/2 tahirire August 7 2010, 18:37:32 UTC
Yay, you got sucked into our meme!!! :D

Sorry about your weekend.

I've like most of Dean's girls, too. I've always liked Lisa, and I liked Jamie a lot as well, and of course I loved Jo, even though she never quite made it there, I think she will always have a special place in the echelon. ♥

But yeah, Lisa has my vote, has ever since s3. :)

And dude - if you keep coming up with phrases like cotton candy made out of fiberglass, you can TOTALLY do this comment fic thing!

We've already had 2 people write their first fic ever over here, it makes me happy to be encouraging new talent. :) :)

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Re: Safety is Relative 2/2 windscryer August 7 2010, 18:47:27 UTC
YAY I GOT SUCKED INTO THE MEME!

I didn't really have plans. Nothing more important than this, anyway.

Oooooh, I ADORED Jaime. If he can't have Lisa and Ben, I'd totally want Jaime! (And Jo was the reason I first watched. I was REALLY hoping for something there. Happily, Show has many other HAWT SEXY SCARY AWESOME good reasons to watch so I stayed on even when the Jo angle fizzled out.)

I was SO happy when they got that last moment before she died, though! *flails*

HAHA 'Cotton candy made out of fiberglass' is probably the most inspired thing I've said in a good long while. But I'll try again just for you. :)

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Re: Safety is Relative 2/2 tahirire August 7 2010, 18:49:19 UTC
Omg! Have you never read my Dean/Jo!? I love it a lot a lot. Hee.
http://tahirire.livejournal.com/75558.html

Warning: Written by me.

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