Fanworks Discussion #1 (previously Fic Discussion #4)

[spnanonhaven]

[originally posted Feb 17 2012]
Post your threads for challenge pieces (fic, art, etc) here. Big bangs, exchanges, themed challenges are all welcome.

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Re: mpreg_bb:Pulling Pigtails(And Other Ways to Show Him You Care)[J2,NC17]by spnfreak15 & trytofly5

[anonymous]

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I love A/B/O verses and I was so excited about this one. And yet I wound up giving in not long after you did. Jared was a sexist douchebag who was all "ugh, don't get your omeganess near me go back to the kitchen and get knocked up like you're supposed to" and Jensen was all peppy and GIRL POWER except that he was an omega and all. And apparently, despite growing up in a society that thought that omegas had a social responsibility to keep themselves at home while on their periods heats, he somehow misses the fact that it's the 15th of the month and thinks that it's the 5th and freaks out because OMG! His heat!!

I mean, seriously? Who mixes up the days of the month that badly? And you'd think that, like a menstrual cycle, a heat would give some indication beforehand that it's about to happen. I always know when my cycle's about to start because I'll get a zit and crave certain foods and be irritated about stupid TV commercials. I know what's up and when it's about to happen. I can't imagine that it would be different for a man about to go into heat and especially not if you've been trained since young childhood to keep track of this.

So yes. Terribly characterization, terrible world building. I just couldn't keep going. I encourage the writer to continue to try - these sorts of errors are the ones that can be hugely improved with a good beta and with practice. It's the stuff you don't think much about unless it's pointed out to you and that's why a second set of eyes works so well. But as it is? Thank you, but I have to pass.