Death By Unicorn 2/2

[tifaching]

There are fewer school groups coming through today, so Dean’s not as busy. He ponders the unicorn while serving ice cream to the women who come see him every day but by the time his shift is almost over he still has no clue what to do next. He spots his replacement heading up the walkway and waves. When he turns his attention back to the last

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[cuddyclothes]

Excellent! I was going to read this earlier but was too tired to do it justice. Really excellent. Well put-together case-fic (well, not exactly a case-fic but you know what I mean), good baddie, and Dean being happy to have Sam bitchface him for the rest of his life.

I wonder, how many of those phone numbers Dean used?

[tifaching]

Oh, I'm sure a good many of them. Kristy the waitress was supposed to play a much bigger part in this as the "dumbest thing Dean's ever done" but I couldn't get it to work. There may be a tiny timestamp in the near future.

Thanks so much, I'm glad you liked it!

[amberdreams]

Yay just in time to load on my kindle to read while I'm away! Glad I;m not the only one having problems with LJ - posting my last fic was a complete mare!

[tifaching]

Oooh, have fun at the con! And while I'm not glad to hear that your posting experience was so awful, I am glad to know it's not just me. I belatedly thought of posting it to Dreamwidth and then just downloading it to LJ and then copy/pasting the whole thing here, but by then it was almost midnight and I was just too tired.

[tifaching]

Thank you!

[saberivojo]

First no need to apologize, I’m thrilled to be able to read! Sorry about LJ. Let me apologize for whatever this comment may contain - I’ve been up for 29 hours due to crappy work and errands and gah, just stuff so I may not sound coherent.

First. Love all the “Oh, my Gods.” So damn cute that Sam and Miriam and eventually Laurel say the same thing. Dean’s strip of tan skin is certainly worthy of the statement! *nods*

Love this: Getting another year at the same school would require a direct commandment from God that his father would probably just ignore.The thought of a unicorn frolicking with zebras at Busch Gardens, just cracks me up

[tifaching]

Oh, I'm so relieved. I really wanted to work the waitress in more but the situation just wouldn't come together. This fic may have a tiny time stamp at some point in the future where Kristy from the diner turns out to be the dumbest thing Dean's ever done. That was the whole reason for setting this at Busch Gardens in the first place, so I'm glad it worked for you without that being part of it.

"Love this: Getting another year at the same school would require a direct commandment from God that his father would probably just ignore." LOL, well this was a story for you. Had to work Papa Winchester in there somehow!

I'm so happy you liked this, and you're welcome!

[phorenice]

That was fun! I really liked the way you built this story, as well as the little details, like Dean "not recognizing" Sam. And the baddie getting impaled by an invisible unicorn is always a plus :D.

I have to admit though, I was a bit distracted by the camera. I fully expected anticipation building because they had to wait for the pictures to be developed. Not really an anachronism, because digicams certainly existed in '99 and were gaining popularity, but well - nothing anybody at my school had. (Didn't help that I pictured them a bit younger before learning Sam's age.)
Annnnd I'm totally overthinking this and feeling old.

Going back to wondering where "home" is for Laurel and Moonshadow now ;)

[tifaching]

Thanks for your thoughts about the camera. I should have put more thought into that because you're right- not that common on school trips back then. Haha! Bet I'm older than you are.

I'm glad the story built convincingly and the details brought more of it to life.

I'm convinced Laurel and Moonshadow ended up somewhere nice, though I bet she'd like a trip back every now and then to get more than a kiss with Dean.

Thanks so much for such a lovely comment!