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[spinelesskarma]

i had to write this essay for one of my classes about how i got to college. i know its not perfect and that some grammar isnt right, but if you could take a min and read it to just tell me if it sucks or not. thanks

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[trentis]

its good story, but thats just it... its a story, not an essay. All you have to do is put it in essay form; intro, body, conclusion.
Hoorah for batemans bay,
missing you dear.

[spinelesskarma]

read it now! better?

coolio

[trentis]

after djbeefy's corrections then it'll be grand!

[djbeefy]

(great intro)As a child I was taught that college was the difference between kids and adults. It was the major landmark in my life that I felt would signify the beginning of my 'life'. Well the truth is that my life started a long time ago. It was the help of parents, friends, and being a world away, that has gotten me here today. So let me start in the beginning.

My parents received a baby girl in the early hours of the morning on April 5th, 1986. Tom and Martha Sampson didn't know what they were getting in to. Ever since that day, they have been giving me endless support. My mother went to college for (and recieved) a business degree(with a) minor in management. Also majoring in business(,) my father got a minor in marketing. Business has been a stable part of my life thanks to them. They have owned over(don't need the other part, 3 isn't a big enough number to use "over") 3 businesses since my arrival and there is no sign of stopping