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arlover in sparrington

My first story

Nov 26, 2007 20:16

One Commodore James Norrington did not sulk. So he was sure that on this day, everyone was mistaken in saying he was sulking. That just couldn’t be. And he was most definitely not in a foul mood because he hadn’t seen one irritating and infuriating pirate captain in over three months. And no, the two were most definitely not a ( Read more... )

Comments 9

hips_lips_tits November 27 2007, 02:45:13 UTC

i like it, but i'm not really a writer, just a reader.

but there is always something so unbelievably sexy about the thought of the staunchly military commodore letting loose and tying one on.. especially in the name of angst over a certain pretty pirate.

so i give it two thumbs up. :)

arlover November 28 2007, 01:59:58 UTC

Thank you. I'm glad you liked it. And I know what you mean about our good commodore. I just refuse to believe that he's tough all the time. I believe that Jack makes everyone come undone, even stuffy up tight commodores.

captain_bookcat November 27 2007, 05:02:55 UTC

very cute. ^_^

arlover November 28 2007, 02:00:49 UTC

Thank you!

anonymous November 27 2007, 16:17:01 UTC

nice try for first effort, but help is needed on spelling and grammar. (sentance structure as well.) but that will come with time and practice.

Keep it up! anonymous November 27 2007, 22:17:51 UTC

For a first story it's not bad! I'd say it was very good!
Especially after reading some of the pitiful offerings on fanfiction.net, this is a good 7/8 out of 10!

Keep it up, it's very good!

And practice makes perfect (if you catch my drift) XD

R.Grant x x

Re: Keep it up! arlover November 28 2007, 02:01:52 UTC

Thank you so much. I will indeed keep it up. I love to write, and I'm pleased to know someone out there enjoys reading it.

anonymous November 28 2007, 05:07:27 UTC

And this is coming from a person who doesn't capitalize and who didn't spell 'sentence' right...

(To the author: Don't worry, dear. I though it was a great first story, I didn't see any glaringly obvious problems in it.)

justin_barrette November 30 2007, 03:23:05 UTC

I thought it was quite cute. I didn't see any major problems, and compared to some of the other fics I've read by authors who have been writing a write... this was really good.

I agree that practice makes perfect, it's a general rule. lol

I would like to see you write more.