Fic - Infinity Land

[sixpences]

What's that, muse? I shouldn't spend my time today packing jumpers or clearing out files on my old PC? I should work on a oneshot that's been giving me grief for weeks and turn it into a severe geek-fest? Well if you say so...

Title: Infinity Land
Rating: PG
Disclaimer: PotC belongeth Mousewards. And Infinity Land is a Biffy Clyro album, so really

Comments

[flynne]

Beautiful. Choked me up, it did.

Thank you.

[sixpences]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it *g*

[gott1172]

I love your muse! This was hauntingly beautiful. My heart skipped a beat when he said "take her". With their 20(?) year age difference this conversation would no doubt come up. I couldn't think of a more perfect way to tell it.

[sixpences]

Thank you! Yeah, there's got to be 15 years between them at the very least, probably more; I liked the idea of Jack thinking about taking care of her after his death (or at least allowing her to take care of herself).

[heartjd]

Suddenly his arm has tightened around her shoulders and she feels him turn his head to bury his face against her neck, mouth hot in contrast to the cool night air as he presses kisses against her skin. She realises he is mumbling something in between them, the words half lost through her hair and the roving of his lips.

"... take her... when I'm gone..."

Wow... that was just... beautiful.

I speak french and I never heard about "voir le loup" ! Interesting..

[sixpences]

Thanks! I came across the phrase entirely by accident in a newspaper article about versions of Little Red Riding Hood, and the strange magpie-sponge hybrid that is my memory seized on it for ficcing purposes.

[silerswench]

Oh this is fabulous. Such a beautiful and thought provoking way to demonstrate the caring and intimacy I believe both Jack and Elizabeth are capable of feeling for eachother. I adore the voice you have given this little ficlet. It has such a quiet and sedate, peaceful quality to it, I can just imagine them sat huddled up having a private conversation like this. The ending is heart-breaking and yet so bittersweetly romantic. A perfect way to express their love and trust.

Definitely becoming a favourite.

[sixpences]

Thank you! I definitely agree about the caring and the intimacy- this piece was quite interesting to write because they can't actually quite see one another, in the dark, but it doesn't really matter; they understand one another too well.

[letutu45]

Okay, your muse? Totally my new best friend. You have to do everything she says from now on, otherwise you'd be depriving the entire world from your beautiful fics. And that's just wrong.

I love, love, love this piece. You paint J/E so brilliantly, making it both bittersweet and loving at the same time. However, I think I have to read it a few hundred more times before I can do it justice.

Wonderful job.

[sixpences]

Well so long as the muse doesn't tell me to jump out of a window, or write fic instead of doing my homework (heck, I can do that all by myself)...

Anyway, thank you! I'm glad the bittersweetness came across well, that kind of arrived out of nowhere when I was writing it and it took a while to work it out properly.