Comments | soul_train: Sour Cherry Soup

soul_train

Sour Cherry Soup

May 21, 2004 10:07

I'm not sure my friend would want it to be broadcast in a public forum....however, I will tell you. But since I won't be using her name, I think it'll be okay ( Read more... )

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ewysiwyg June 1 2004, 22:02:09 UTC

Aww . .. to think you wrote this just for me . . .

You have a . . . a graphic turn of phrase there hon'.

Have you let her read this at all?

Zee Post soul_train June 2 2004, 14:08:25 UTC

Yes, she read it. She just doesn't know I put it here. But she really really liked it because she read it at work while people were coming in and out of the office. It reminded her of some things and learned her of what it's like from my perspective, which is really cool.

What exactly do you mean by "graphic turn of phrase"? Would that be the same as "a good eye for the porn"? LOL

Re: Zee Post ewysiwyg June 2 2004, 15:11:53 UTC

Apparently, my sister really liked it . . .

Me, I lean away from male porn unless it's about someone I don't know . . .

And it makes it completely impossible for me to ever sleep with you EVER.

I would ide to have any of my body parts described like that. It makes me itchy just thinking about it. ;)

Re: Zee Post soul_train June 3 2004, 16:29:14 UTC

I'm glad your sister has such good taste. You might learn something from her. :)

Like it or not, the use of descriptive language can be a lot of fun for some of us....are you and "it" "that" and "in here" kind of person?

not to be critcal but . . . unomesowell June 2 2004, 10:38:50 UTC

You could write for anyone with Fabio on the cover if only you could refrain from pharses like womb honey. That was a bit much.

Re: not to be critcal but . . . soul_train June 2 2004, 14:15:41 UTC

Ah...disregard my taunts in the previous post...I didn't realize you had already commented.

Womb honey is the way I think of it. Mmm...especially when it's all sloppy and runnin'.

Would you prefer I just said dumbly with my buck teeth sticking out, "Cum"?

Re: not to be critcal but . . . unomesowell June 3 2004, 08:31:54 UTC

No but there were a few phrases that were just too silly and it detracted from your well written piece. You want people to get cuught up not hung up. If I have to stop mid paragraph and go "womb honey?" then I have lost my pacing and will not finish in the same frame of mind. My suggestion would be to refrain from any . . . motherly references . . . like birth canal and wombs unless you are actually truing to knock her up and make it sexy doing it. Erica had an "appropriate" list going once. Ask her.

Re: not to be critcal but . . . soul_train June 3 2004, 16:41:43 UTC

Let's call it how it is....is a woman not attracted to a man's swinging testes? Why can't men speak about that warm pooky womb-an belly that they don't have? It's a hot cauldron of subterranean mystery. Don't forget that story was written with the specific purpose of exposing a man's sensations to a woman (the one involved *thouroughly* enjoyed it). In any case...I thought your own weekend was quite nice and I can understand the difficulties of being mommy and posting racy updates. LOL I actually know a good bit about the language barriers around us...it can affect even family members who've grown up by your side, you know. Imagine Robert Plant screeching "Communication Breakdown".